Ivory Soap

[alexanderscttb]

Damp clothes drying

Comments

[marlawentmad]

I love that the more times I read this, the wider my scope becomes. Succinctly done!

[alexanderscttb]

I'm glad it compelled you to read and reread!

[encrefloue]

It truly is horrifying to confront the unending cost and exploitation wrought by our first-world lifestyles. But if freedom of others and the natural world is the price tag, so be it!
That em dash ending is such a gut-punch. The economization of misery continues! Such a searing decrial, put so succinctly. Awesome job, man!

[alexanderscttb]

Freedom is no virtue when only enjoyed by the precious few!
Thank you for your close reading, encrefloue.
And I'm glad that you appreciated the em dash. . . for some reason the whole thing didn't feel quite complete without it.

[halfshellvenus]

I like the imagery here, and the ending... it's true. Many of our luxuries and comforts come at the expense of someone else.

[alexanderscttb]

I suppose what really grinds my gears is when people get quite mad if someone points that out.

[n8tastrophe]

I get a beat-vibe, which I like. Short and to the point.

[alexanderscttb]

I'm glad a beat-vibe came through.
When it comes to poetry, I do tend to think that shorter, is more appealing--