Thank you so much! It seemed clear to me that I needed to risk veering into some new direction. Knowing this connected for you has really given me confidence to keep trying that moving forward. Thank you again!
I _loved_ the first poem-- the language, the flow, the imagery.
Crocodile tears on the tongue of an apple I liked both the 'piratical' sense of unfortunate fate and the abstraction of the fall from Eden all at the same time.
Looking at the date you posted this, I can guess that it was inspired by the U.S. once again being on the cusp of war. In this poem, you encapsulate the cyclical nature of those tendencies: towards anger, selfishness and aggression; and also towards connection, creativity and peace. I also felt it evoked images of a famous classical triptych of Adam and Eve, first in Eden, then trying the apple, and then being cast out.
I would like to see that triptych. This Biblical subject has of course been treated by countless classical artists of tremendous brilliance, to which I'm merely alluding, because the expulsion from Eden clearly has enormous symbolic significance for us human beings. I'm super partial to the images produced by William Blake when it comes to a classical artist of this particular type
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In this I was going for something that took on a form that was a little different than normal writing or speech.
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The second verse is my favorite. I love the imagery painted there!
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It seemed clear to me that I needed to risk veering into some new direction.
Knowing this connected for you has really given me confidence to keep trying that moving forward.
Thank you again!
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Crocodile tears on the tongue of an apple
I liked both the 'piratical' sense of unfortunate fate and the abstraction of the fall from Eden all at the same time.
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I worried about that part especially, but you really hit on what I was going for--
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