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aliensex_fiend

a story about a boy that could fly

Jan 15, 2009 15:31

The instant curl of his fingers clutched at the words, stuck, and the sudden offering felt as if it had been symbolic to that of the holy eucarist. Had he been happy? Had he been content floating through saline shores with the distant crash of waves lapping at his feet? The sound of concrete crunching beneath his feet sounded like dozens of tiny ( Read more... )

reitaxruki, gazette

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evilgeniuskoji January 16 2009, 07:43:47 UTC

Wow. I am amazed, truly, as usual by your writing. It feels slightly incomplete, but maybe that's best. The imagery was quite lovely, and I did feel that freedom of space and air. The words you chose had such ambiguity in them that I quite thought that Ruki had jumped at first, and things still remain rather foggy to me, so I'm kinda confused at the end.

Regardless, it was lovely in writing nad style as per usual, and I quite enjoyed it. =O

aliensex_fiend January 27 2009, 23:05:52 UTC

I felt like I should have cleaned it up as well but I hadn't known where exactly to refurbish it since I had just gotten the segment of writing from a larger portion of writing between myself an a roleplay partner. I really liked the idea but I should have cleaned up the loose ends so to speak ( ... )

evilgeniuskoji January 28 2009, 00:14:56 UTC

I love long comments, so don't worry about it.

Ah, wow, so I entirely misread the piece, huh. Thanks for clearing it up for me. ^^

It does feel a bit muddled, but I'm sure it'll be great once you've cleaned it up.

aliensex_fiend January 28 2009, 02:57:53 UTC

It can go either way because it's always upon the reader to interpret it the way you wish but I just managed to screw that up by making my writing a little unclear. I think I just sent them in a complete turnabout.

I'm almost afraid to touch it but at least I'm stepping up to the next and attempting to write something I've been thinking about for six months. I'm hoping it'll be as good as my previous writing but it feels like I pump out one good memorable work after a long absence.

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shizuka_no_yume January 16 2009, 10:28:20 UTC

Beautiful. ♥

Unlike you I am not so good with words. So I'll keep it simple, but I meant it.

aliensex_fiend January 27 2009, 22:58:52 UTC

I always seem to be late whenever I reply to any comments.

Thank you, I think you manage to make a collective group of words sound beautiful just like your art.

puslespill January 28 2009, 18:46:15 UTC

Thank you.

And allow me to add I'm 1000 times jealous of your art.

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aliensex_fiend January 27 2009, 22:57:26 UTC

I apologize for not having updated but it feels good to come back again with something fresh. ♥