correction to my last entry.

[alorkin]

Hello all,(again

Comments

[shadylane88]

They're all good but your Hermione looks more like Ginny to me.

Reply to shadylane88

[alorkin]

Thank you for your critique. You are the first. I woder which pic, you are referring to, when you say Hermione looks like Ginny. I can try to correct that in future pictures. My guess is it would be the one where she's slapping Harry. Please let me know. I can be reached at: Alorkin@msn.com. thanks again. Alorkin.

[kokiri85]

Hi there! *waves* I've looked through all the non-NC-17 art, and I guess mt critique would be, that you have a good sense for shading, but the figures could be better defined against the backgrounds. I tend to give everything a dark outline, particularly when I'm using colored pencil, so that the shapes and details don't get lost in the graininess of the medium.

You should know, though, that the last time I took an art class, the teacher was always lecturing me about how I overused dark outlines and it gave everything a coloring-book quality, so I might just be trying to spread a bad habit ^^

[lizardspots]

Hello, welcome to LJ! Thank you for leaving a comment on my Snape picture. I took a look at your gallery, and wow, your colouring is very impressive! You are also imaginative with perspective and backgrounds. I hope you don't mind if I friend your journal. The only critique I would offer at this stage is for you to consider adding darker lineart, perhaps with a sharp pencil or black ink. Your Hermione also sees a tad too red-haired, making her look like Ginny - perhaps make her hair more brown/blonde? The best way to improve one's art is by looking at other fanartists' work, I've found. It worked for me. :D

I look forward to seeing more art from you! If you are interested in adult rated het fic and art, there is a wonderful community called erotic_elves. I suggest you go take a peak at it. :)

[reallycorking]

Hi! I just thought I'd leave you some feedback here, since you asked for it. :) I've looked at your gallery before, and you have an great range of color and vivacity in your work. I especially enjoyed details like the color choices on the dragon in the second First Task picture. You also seem to have a great imagination for background details, subject matter, and body positioning. I have to agree with Lizard on the topic of clarity- I think it would greatly help your drawings if you used some darker lineart to emphasize your figures and shapes, they often get lost amongst the busyness of the backgrounds. Another way to make your figures pop out would be to use more muted colors for things that don't need as much emphasis, such as curtains and other more unimportant background details. Sometimes the colors you use (such as blazing reds) tend to distract from what the viewer should actually be looking at-like people having sex. ;) One other nitpicky thing I have to offer is that occasionally your anatomy seems a bit off. Exaggerating

[essacat]

The link doesn't work for me! *flogs with licorish whip*