Savin' Me Chapter 5

[alpha_centari27]

To the best of his ability Music Man tried to keep track of the floor number the doctor punched on the elevator, every turn, every long corridor each one as monotonous and uninspiring as the next until he was led to a narrow, but deep room set up to accommodate multiple patients. Kat was situated toward the very front of the room on the right hand

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[aurawind]

Oh my! This was EXCELLENT! I adored how you wrapped Wayne's thoughts around that single piece of sushi. Next time I could eat suski, I'll be crying because of this marvelous story ;u;

And the detail of Wayne looking for Kat's family is really awesome too. Poor guy, he doesn't know anything...

[alpha_centari27]

Yeah I kinda thought it would be: sad and funny at the same time to have Wayne go on this emo trip triggered by a pre-packaged thing of sushi.

Off hand I don't know if and how Anne will figure into any future chapters I write, but I thought I should bring things full-circle.

So this next part there will be some back story introduced.

[aurawind]

oh, wow... this new part was SO INTENSE! I'm feeling really bad for Anne, she was a good woman. Kat shouldn't be so harsh with her.
(But excellent storytelling here. It's so realistic! Wonderful job, dear ^^)

[alpha_centari27]

From my point of view I couldn't see things going anywhere, but south.

Kat just wakes up and is in pain from Anne trying to hug her, she figures that Music Man must have been snooping around her old apartment complex which she and other people could interpret as an invasion of privacy and lastly she is put on the defensive by asking WHY she hung up on Anne.

There will be some more angst and drama in the next part, but MM and Kat will make up. A lot of the dialogue is written out so mostly need to write in some description of what is going on.

[aurawind]

FInally I could read this last part, and I absolutelly adored it! You put a great depth in wayne's words, and it great to see them finally beginning to understand each other! This was absolutelly adorable. Amazing job, dear :D!

[alpha_centari27]

I think my favorite part in this last section is a tie between Music Man's moment in the bathroom where he says, "she's stubborn," and the last part where he offers to pick up Kat's things.

I guess I find it amusing that Megamind can't touch Music Man, but in her own way Kat can bring him to his knees.

Something about this fandom brings out the comedian me--it's fun having Kat and Music Man playfully banter back and forth.