excellent story niraj, very detailed, and kept me interested. you did a great job on describing the woman, and it felt like her beauty i could almost imagine. It was saddening at the end, you never being able to see her again. I liked how you always jumped when her smiled widened and eyes brightened at every dolphin jump, showing how engrossed you were in her beauty, and her actions. But i know if this was a REAL story, niraj would use his real charm, and instead of being in a bus seat, looking at that woman from far away, he would be in that bus seat lookin down at his cell phone, adding her number. niraj patel shows no boundies when it comes to women. though saddening, whenever you jumped at every moment she did when the dolphins were performing, i felt as if i was jumping also, imagining a woman so beautiful and gorgeous that it was a lady you could only dream of, and well it was, but i think she swept you off your feet, and i think thats essential in serious relationships, as if you were in another realm of reality whenever
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This is some pretty good creative writing. I mean it really put me into the story by not necessarily identifying people with names but simply their features. Beautifully written. It somewhat mirrors how many of us guys feel. We know it won't work and can't work but we can't help admiring because the beauty of that girl is so captivating that it takes our breath away and strips away the inhibitions we did have.
Also, don't ever steal my dreams again or I just might have to kill you buddy.
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Also, don't ever steal my dreams again or I just might have to kill you buddy.
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By the way, we put this in Lit Mag. You might want to change the title, though; I assure you that this isn't obsession.
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