Story- but I'm stuck

[amandam89]

The pain finally ceased. Almost every part of my body was numb, and I half wished it would just end. I could feel my face beginning to burn, and that was the only thing that hurt. I knew my wife and two children were in the back, but I had no idea if they were even alive. I didn't hear any crying, screaming, anything. All I could do was replay

Comments

idk

[docbargmk]

i dont know about all this it is really good don't get me wrong but it is more of a story rather than an essay or report. I know he wants us to look at it a different way but i just think you need to focus more on the therapy not the accident or the hospital stay. There isn't really a whole lot on the therapy just 2-3 paragraphs. I think you need to tone down everything else and focus on the therapy. Just my opinion. so you decide.