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[amaya_natsuya]

Okay, so I'm running a little behind with fanfiction.  You're not allowed to kill me because I can't finish the story if I'm dead!  So there!  :P

Seriously, though.  Work takes up more time than school, I think, even if I don't have homework and I'm just always tired!  But I'm trying to get in the habit of bi-weekly updates, which will hopefully

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[anonymous]

Liked this chapter, will it lead to the pilots finally finding out about Harry having magaic and will Harry end up seeing the Dursleys again without the others around to protect him. Really like this story can't wait to read more.

[anonymous]

Okay. I am sooooo happy that you finally updated!!!! I mean omg! I was getting so worried! I love the whole Harry jealousy thing. It was so correct, I mean. Anyway, just curious, does Harry have his scar? I can remember if you mentioned it before... Just wondering. Anyway, AWESOME!!!!! YAYAYAYAAA! Your devout reader, xXDancerintheDarkXx

[kjady]

Very nice update. This story keeps getting better and better.
Also I think the song you were listening too was Good luck and Good Bye. Of course I could be wrong. :)

[etheril]

I'm so glad to see the next installment in the 'Flight of the Bumblebee.' Very nicely done; I especially like the parallel at the end between Quatre's thinking and Harry's thinking; one thinking he is a freak for having abilities that make him different, and the other being told he was a freak.

I'm just a little disappointed with Ali's reactions to some of the things, even though we know that his father was prone to yelling and, from the hints dropped, possibly abusive. I don't think he would just sit there while Harry was throwing his tantrum? At the very least he might try to get his friend to do homework with him? Or is Ali in a different room? It is a little confusing there, perhaps clarify it a little?

I think Ali would have a reaction to Harry saying that the Pilots love him more than Harry, and would rather keep him than Harry.

All in all, great post and I look forward to the next segment!

[jess_eklom]

I liked the scene with Q and Tro... but I think this story is going a tad slowly. I think you should have a sort of mini-plot (confict, action, *resolution*) to further the story. This, in turn, could be used as a device to help Harry grow a little and bond with his new guardians.

[amaya_natsuya]

I totally agree. In fact, this particular mini-conflict was put here for just that purpose. It should be cleared up fully next chapter. At least, that's my intent. I just needed me a little spark. ^_^ What did you think of the last bit? With Harry and Quatre having the weird reaction? I had some trouble with it, and I'm still not sure all the reactions are up to par.