justprompts: next time you point a finger i might have to bend it back | or break it off

[amazonhomemaker]

Prompt: Playing God by Paramore
Timeline: Season 1
Summary: In which Sally learns the joys of feminism, and Dick, Harry, and Tommy learn to fend for themselves. Of course, none of this goes well. Blame Albright.

Comments

[alien_catcher]

XD XD XD Oh I LOLed so hard.

I wish I could write humour this well! It's funny and fun, and just Sally... You write her so well!

&hearts

Yes, I know, wrong account. :P

[elementrymydear]

D'awwwwwwwwwwwwww, thank you bb. Glad I could make you laugh. ♥ XD

[twicedisplaced]

This is so perfectly on character, I couldn't help but feel like I was watching the show in my mind's eye!

My only criticism (very minor and unasked) is that the ending seems a little rushed -- I feel a little more elaboration on the physical confrontation between Sally and Dick would make the ending feel less surprising. I don't think it would have to be much -- perhaps just a blow or two and maybe some token Feminism phrase (like "I am woman, hear me roar!") to go out on.

But, you know, it's really EFFING FANTASTIC! Your grasp of characterization is top notch! <3 <3

[elementrymydear]

lol thank you darlin!

Your criticism is actually my own criticism of it too. The ending was rushed, and I feel like the whole thing needs another little scene in there too, but I just sort of lost steam. I might go back and add some things to it some day if I am feeling ambitious, but you're definitely right about that. ♥

And I'm on Sherlock's account b/c I'm too lazy to push a button. ;D

[twicedisplaced]

I'm glad we're on the same page! <3

Also, Sherlock FTW. I am being taken over by Larry's infectious love for Holmes (which he is just now discovering.) He just bought the books, so yeah! FTW.