Just To Prove I'm Doing It

[amberdulen]

New and improved! This is chapter one of my NaNoWriMo novel from 2007. The rest is under a custom friendslock; if you'd like to read the rest, just comment and I'll add you to the filter.

Link to all chapters ("Hench" tag)

Chapter One

The Citadel of Evil, the one on Fourth and Maple, was ticking down toward self-destruction.

Comments

[quintessentialp]

Interesting, pretty cool. GREAT first line. I know editing is kind of against the idea, but when you do go back to this I might flesh this out a bit. I had to read it twice to get a sense for who the narrator was at all, what side he was on or if he was on a side at all.

I know it's supposed to be happening quickly in the story, but that doesn't mean you need to write it quickly. To the contrary! Build it up, torment us with anticipation and worry.

[twapa]

WIN.

[whirlwindmonk]

Very nice. You will be posting the rest as you write it, right? I'm really curious as to how this will turn out.

[amberdulen]

Maybe. It depends on how it turns out and how much I feel like formatting it for the web. :P If I don't and you're really interested, I'll just send you a copy at the end.

[floorlamps]

OH MAN this is fun. Can't wait to see where it goes.

[lookingland]

you're doing it, you're doing it!

: D

fabulous intro!