New home for my writings.

[amberkitsune]

I have been rewriting "A Little Fox Tale" lately into a slightly different story. To that end, I setup a WordPress blog at http://fox-tales.net/ to post my stories and drafts at. Please hop over there and look over Chapters 1 & 2 of "Fox Tale" and let me know what you think in comparison to the

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[unisagi]

I like it so far. But somehow this time what Kasumi did to Joe seems to be so full of deliberate mischief towards her rescuer that it seems darker. Maybe it is because of Kasumi's attitude this time.

It will be interesting to see how you develop the story this time.

[amberkitsune]

The story in general, and Kasumi in particular are darker than before. one of the complaints I received from a few reviewers was that the story was too full of "Rainbows and Butterflies" early on to be interesting.

With that in mind, I changed the parts several characters play in the story as well as the direction the story travels in the early part. I still intend (so far) to have the story end up at nearly the same destination, more or less.

Key characters who will change in some way include Kasumi, Aya, Kimiko a little bit, and Chisato to some extent. Some of the antagonists will change as well. A few characters will simply disappear from this version of the story.

[unisagi]

Ah. Well, I like "rainbows and butterflies".

Still, I will probably like this version also.