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Apr 04, 2006 01:33
I haven't posted in a while but I kind of need some feeback on this article (
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lauryn_starz
April 4 2006, 14:52:22 UTC
D - i like the ending. don't change it. it leaves me with a sense of mystery and wonder.
i can't believe this is an ARTICLE! It sounds like a fiction piece...when did all this take place?
i'm in israel. i wish you were here.
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ambiguous_kiss
April 5 2006, 21:10:14 UTC
I told you about them. I picked them up this summer infront of Anna's.
I wish I was there too, but I WILL be in Europe soon!!!! We should arrange to meet up!
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snowflake_fox
April 6 2006, 06:45:46 UTC
line about the sun dwindling doesn't do anything for me
"kill your darlings" as they say. If you really like a line, chances are, you should more likely than not take it out.
sunlight can dwindle, but not the sun.
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i can't believe this is an ARTICLE! It sounds like a fiction piece...when did all this take place?
i'm in israel. i wish you were here.
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I wish I was there too, but I WILL be in Europe soon!!!! We should arrange to meet up!
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"kill your darlings" as they say. If you really like a line, chances are, you should more likely than not take it out.
sunlight can dwindle, but not the sun.
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