Fic: A Not So Random Stranger

[amethyst_lupin]

Title: A Not So Random Stranger

Words: 2,200

Characters: Jack, Suzie

Rating: R (for language)

Warning: None.

Spoilers: DW Boomtown.

Summary: He was bored, and she was there.

Beta: Thanks to kahtyasofia for the beta!!!

Author's Notes: Just a missing scene, nothing fancy ;)

Disclaimer: Really, I don't own anything. I don't even own my car.

Comments

[thaddeusfavour]

This is really a very clever idea. I like Suzie's voice in this even more than Jack's. And the way she sat and shifted, I think you got a very good - quick and dirty - characterization of her in here. I also liked Jack being lured out onto the Plass by people. He's just not a good loner, is he? Which is probably why future Jack gets all cranky with his staff, it doesn't come naturally to him to be quiet, mysterious, closed-off...

I know you've found some willing beta readers, but I looked back through you're lj and wondered if you'd tried at The Torchwood Writers' Union for help and support when writing Torchwood fic? It's great for asking canon questions or discussing character. Just... don't read the Pet Hates thread like it's "How To" thread. That's just where we vent when something gets to us. I've been told it can be quite intimidating reading the whole thing. ::grin::

Much better on the "oops" as well! Just one small one here that really made me laugh: From the edges of the doors shone a white light that was defiantly wrong.

[amethyst_lupin]

Suzie has always kind of fascinated me... I'm glad you liked :) And thank you for the rec on TWH. It made my day week *grins*

I'll definitely check out the Torchwood Writers' Union. It sounds awesome.

Oops! Just more proof the spell check isn't enough ;)

[thaddeusfavour]

You're welcome! And if you only had seen some of my typos before the betas got to them... I've had my own eyes plus two betas, and stuff still gets past us! Argh! Oh well. Glad to see you came over to TWU. Despite the venting threads, we're generally a welcoming group.

[robling_t]

Haha, the timeline-crossing potential with "Boom Town" is always fun... :)

[amethyst_lupin]

I'm always surprised there isn't more Boom Town fic out there... :)

Thanks!

[amethyst_lupin]

Thank you!

[artistwife]

What a delightful fic. Suzie very clear, brash, abrasive, suzielike. The more innocent Jack. We forget, I think, how innocent he was back before he was immortal. He is much more cynical and cold now.

[amethyst_lupin]

Thank you! Jack has changed... now you've got me wondering what Ianto would think of innocent!Jack.

[artistwife]

Go for it. Did you ever read Demotu's A Matter Of Time. Very innocent Jack. Ianto loved him too. I would love to read your version of Ianto and mortal youthful Jack.

[amethyst_lupin]

Demotu is an excellent writer, but I'm not sure that I've actually read 'A Matter Of Time'. I'll check it out.

I would love to read your version of Ianto and mortal youthful Jack.

Ha, thanks! I've more plot bunnies over here than I know what to do with, but I've been writing lots so you never know...

[kel_reiley]

suzie!
there's not nearly enough suzie around here

[amethyst_lupin]

Suzie is a great character. We never see much of Suzie, but still have a pretty decent back story to go by... she has a lot of great fic possibilities I'm always surprised there isn't more stuff out there.