Fic: Close Encounters, SGA, NC-17, McKay/Sheppard

[amific]

Title: Close Encounters
Author: Amireal
Rating: NC-17
Length: Approx 4500 words.
Notes: Well this was... wish fulfillment for me, it's crack like, but not fully crack. Thanks to seperis for the beta and the bitchslaps. Also thanks to fairestcat who went over it and found the four apparently *glaring* errors that were hoarding other people's enjoyment for themselves

Comments

[margueritem]

Erm, question, is this the betaed version? Because I've seen a couple of typos just now, at the very beginning. *goes back to read*

[amireal]

it is, but we're all tired. Go ahead, mock me to death. *sad*

[margueritem]

Aw. *pets you (erm, if you don't mind)* I do not mock. Well, not about typos.

I shouldn't even read your story, just now. I have to go back to my thesis writing. Alas.

So, I'll read it tomorrow and will not mock. I'm sure I'll like it.

[amireal]

go ahead and point things out when you do read, I'll fix it up. LJ is fluid man. *grins*

Go be edjumacational and read the crack tomorrow.

[amireal]

It's my particular kink, I LOVE the angst of knowing this shit is hard, but ultimately worth it and really fucking inevitable.

Thanks for the feedback! *sends chocolates and tissues*

[shoemaster]

I love the structure and the premise of this, and that John still freaks out periodically. It's just so cute. And they're both afraid. *happy sigh* Denial "ignore me don't talk about this!" Rodney, too :D Loved it.

Two quick things. Rodney's hands are like steal and It reminds himof Tina Groober.

[amireal]

I think I fixed those, *promises to check later*.

Thanks for the feedback!

[shoemaster]

:D No problem, I'm half cut off from the internet so I'm stocking up on fic on a flashdrive so I can still read and this one is definitely being saved :D

[seagull2eagle]

Awesome, as always. You have really the best writing style and feel for depth and breadth of characters, emotions, moving from point a to point b with the journey being the point rather than the points themselves, and... and, just wow. I'd printed out several of your longer ones to read not-on-the-internet, and I keep meaning to come back and comment on them, because they're all so great.

In this one, I love the development. How you take John from the start of it to the next level to the next... By the third time jump, I was *waiting* for the words "a month later" (or any timeframe later), just to see where you were taking them next (and I so didn't expect the John taking the bullet!) And from there, things just spiralled to the final satisfying ending. You say so much in there without ever spelling it out, and I love that.

it occurs to John that 'crush' is probably the wrong word for it.

"Get better," John demands, brushing his lips over Rodney's forehead, "because this freak-out I feel coming? Will work better with two

[amireal]

Awesome, as always. You have really the best writing style and feel for depth and breadth of characters, emotions, moving from point a to point b with the journey being the point rather than the points themselves,

Sometimes I think I do that too much, but I just love watching the struggle.

(and I so didn't expect the John taking the bullet!) And from there, things just spiralled to the final satisfying ending. You say so much in there without ever spelling it out, and I love that.

That was the point of the bullet. *wink*

I've always been a fan of not leading the reader by the hand, because you find that in a lot of fic and I'm like "Well duh!" or "boooring"

I'm glad you liked the fic, thanks for the feedback!

[anitac588]

Oh, oh, this was so good. I love the denial-near-death-experience-makes-me-realise-I-love-you-freakingout stories. *g* It made me happy and feeling warm and I think I'm going to reread this one many times.
Thank you.

[amireal]

I love them too!

Thanks for the feedback!