Fic: Scenes from a Lesser War, SGA, NC-17, McKay/Sheppard 1/3

[amific]

Title: Scenes from a Lesser War
Author: Amireal
Rating: NC-17
Length: 20,500
Notes: Thanks to Seperis for betaing. Not that I had to ask since she practically slipped me a mickey and stole the file from my computer. Thanks to fairestcat and everagaby for general cheerleading and the like. You rock even when you mock. Finally this story is something that I've wanted to write for a

Comments

[allhoneyboo]

The prom? OMG *luvs you*

I think this is the best "don't ask don't tell disbanded/coming out fic" I've ever read.

And it's only part one.

*clicks part 2*

[kellifer_fic]

Just awesome!

[sobelle]

Fabulous...really, who thinks what the implications of such a major change would be... looking forward to part 2 and 3 and 4 and... ummm, sorry, got carried away.

[mecurtin]

nits remaining (that I spotted):

> of one particular storage closet,.One
closet. One

>think that's best John,
think that's best, John,

>his well abused 'out of the office' sign
well-abused

> his sidearm well attached.
was attached? or well-attached (which I wouldn't suggest, given "well-abused" in the preceding para)

> which for all its wounded
delete "which"

> What's u,p Rodney?"
What's up,

> armbefore automatically
arm before automatically

> and *then told them
wandering asterisk

> sweat and Rodney
I have no idea why the italics didn't come through. probably you want to just set it off with asterisks as you do elsewhere.

> some ways I'll grant you that
some ways, I'll grant you that

> pushed a chair towards wall.
pushed a chair towards the wall.

> hate the wraith!
hate the Wraith!
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I love this story so, so much. In addition to our mutual hand fetish, I always adore stories where they don't say the L word, they *show* it in all the ways they have.

PS

[mecurtin]

this crept in:

"I see from your stunned look that you've already read it."

Definitely looks like MSOffice was somehow involved . . .

Re: PS

[amireal]

MS office was involved.

I think I got the worst of it killed. I am annoyed that I'm not seeing it in my browser. *growls*

Got your last nits too.