Due to Sanju's overwhelmingly kind response, here is my first crappy fanfic.
I wasn't originally planning on posting this but due to chanjuu 's kind response, I've decided to post it up. Please note that this is the first time I've ever written a fanfic so it isn't as good as everyone else's.
I can't promise a sequel cos I have no idea where I am going with this.
This is only a draft and this is also temporary and will be deleted ( Read more... )
I can't promise a sequel cos I have no idea where I am going with this.
This is only a draft and this is also temporary and will be deleted ( Read more... )
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Ryosuke fell in love with her at first sight...HARD...tsk tsk is Aoi and Keito really together?!
and for the constructive criticism, I think grammars are one. but aside from that, nothing major. even though the story is clichéd as you claim, you made it interesting and worth reading so i believe that you are one good writer. also, i like the "dream". i think that it has a significance to the plot itself - if you continued doing this.
good job!
P.S. i just have to know: why is there an old scar in Ryosuke's shoulder?
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If that's how you interpreted it, then my fic was a success :D That's what I was aiming for, for Yamada to fall for her instantly :D
Sorry. If I answered that, it would spoil the whole story. As much as I'd like to spoil it for you :)
AWW. THANK YOU <3 All your praise made my day :D
It's not really a 'dream', it's more like a 'flashback'. That's all I'm going to spoil for you :D
The scar is all from his past. But you'll slowly understand why it's there once the story starts to develop more in the next chapter. The 'dream' also gives out a lot of hints.
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