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amokeh

My first Atlantis Fic!

Feb 03, 2007 18:54

Title: Is That Stuff Sold by the Gallon?
Author: amokeh
Rating: G
Pairings: Sheppard/Beckett, established relationship
Spoilers: None
Warnings: None
Disclaimer: Obviously, I don’t own them. Wish I did, though. Well, at least Carson - I think I could get by with just renting John. VBEG
Author's Notes: This is my first attempt at anything larger than ( Read more... )

beckett/sheppard, sga, fic

Comments 12

billystarpip February 4 2007, 02:50:26 UTC

This is really cute! I was quite impressed with your characterization of John and Carson (as well as the others). Bravo!

amokeh February 4 2007, 03:08:44 UTC

Thank you! I think I was actually re-writing some of it while you were probably reading it, heh! Since I don't have a beta yet, I found some mistakes. But I really appreciate the feedback. Since this is my first SGA story, I wasn't sure if I had captured the characters accurately; I'm glad you felt that I did. :)

victoriaely February 4 2007, 11:34:54 UTC

Love it :) The characterization was very good and I really liked the way you showed Carson as being careful, gentle, but at the same time playful and teasing.
Great job :)
Looking forward to more fics from you :)

amokeh February 4 2007, 19:29:14 UTC

Thanks for the lovely feedback! I hope to write more, time willing. In fact, the line challenge has given me quite a few ideas. :D

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amokeh February 4 2007, 21:12:04 UTC

Thank you! I'm really glad you enjoyed it and I do hope to write more. I've been lurking on livejournal for far too long.... ;)

thefannishwaldo February 5 2007, 22:32:07 UTC

Brilliant! I so love this. (And kudos for getting in *two* lines.)

Carson was spot on. He's going to fix you, don't worry. But if he gets to have a good time with you while he does... he's so going to! :)

Also loved hearing half of the argument through the radio. That was priceless. Exactly what Elizabeth would have heard. And really funny.

But this... this was the best:
“Ya know, back home, that would have made the ten o’clock news.” He moved next to John and popped open the bottle. “But here, it’s probably not even the strangest thing that’ll happen this week.”

Perfect use of the line. Weaving it into the dialogue to make it so natural. So... KUDOS! Please do more!

amokeh February 6 2007, 01:35:25 UTC

Thank you so much for the great feedback! I'm not completely comfortable writing slash, but I love both characters so decided to have a go, keeping it very mild. You know, my dream is to write a team story (with emphasis on Beckett/Sheppard) that utilizes every one of the lines. Heh. But knowing my natural verbosity, and seeing as how it took me over 2000 words to use only 2 of them, I'd probably end up with something novel length. :D But there are several of them that could be used in a single conversation that have definitely gotten the plot bunnies under my desk multiplying like, well, bunnies. So I'll probably have at least one more go at it, seeing as how the challenge is good for the entire month. :)

thefannishwaldo February 6 2007, 01:46:24 UTC

I'm not completely comfortable writing slash, but I love both characters so decided to have a go, keeping it very mild.
Mild is absolutely fine. Most of my stuff doesn't have sex for one reason or another. They were still absolutely adorable together. :)

You know, my dream is to write a team story (with emphasis on Beckett/Sheppard) that utilizes every one of the lines.
OMG! I will write a story to spec for you or make you icons or whatever if you can do this. I would so LOVE to see this. PLEASE!!!

amokeh February 6 2007, 02:59:33 UTC

You know, my dream is to write a team story (with emphasis on Beckett/Sheppard) that utilizes every one of the lines.
OMG! I will write a story to spec for you or make you icons or whatever if you can do this. I would so LOVE to see this. PLEASE!!!
Does it have to be done by the end of February? Because, you know, February's a pretty short month.... ;)

Seriously, though, I do have some ideas, they'd just take a bit of work to get down on paper. There are a few of the lines (like #9 or 28) that would need a bit of set up. So, it would be involved.

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hugglewolf March 19 2007, 18:49:03 UTC

Carson's right about John and his luck going through the Stargate. Aliens made him do it; getting seduced by the femme / male fatale; getting drugged; getting kidnapped; getting shot/drowned/roughed up/caught in a time dilation field (delete as applicable) - it could only happen to him.

I'm surprised Carson hasn't banned him from off world missions altogether. But the image of Shep, trying to burrow deeper into his blanket - is too cute. :)

amokeh March 24 2007, 02:10:27 UTC

But the image of Shep, trying to burrow deeper into his blanket - is too cute. :)

It's his boyish charm - I can totally seeing him doing that. ;)

I'm surprised Carson hasn't banned him from off world missions altogether.

He could just tie him to the bed. ::VBEG::

Thanks for the comment. :)