Hey there! Finally got round to reading this piece, and I wonder why no one else has commented on it. It's really absorbing! =O I started reading slowly at first, and then I realised that I couldn't stop reading. I like how you've introduced more elements into the dream, and even woven the diary into it. Also liked the entry with the character finding all sorts of things in the sand, it sure added to character depth!
I like how you slowly introduced the characters without really explaining who they were - it's fun figuring out how they were related to the persona. =D
Oh, I have been neglectful! Sorry, I've read this but just couldn't nab the time to comment. :( Forgive me?
Like the darling aquarius_galuxy said, this is absorbing! You've captured the scattered feeling a person has when confused by a dream, those moments of pure panic, the struggle with acceptance of fate, then detachment... I love the elements you introduced and THE ENDING!!! Hit by a bus? Yowza! Terrific job! I can't wait to read more of your entries! (Also, if you do decide to re-visit this and do some re-working of it... gimme a buzz, okay? I want to read it!! :D Thank you so much for agreeing to be in the Showcase! I hope we see you around the Flame often! Keep writing! Kathy
You are always forgiven! :D Thanks for featuring me, and I'm glad you enjoyed the piece! I'll definitely let you know when I make any changes and I'll be hanging around the Flame for a while, most likely. :DDD
Oh, I'm so glad :) You're most welcome! It's definitely my pleasure to be doing the Showcase and I'm so very glad you accepted the invite. Gosh, I love revisions *good thing because I always seem to have do my stuff over and over and..* :D
I'm happy to hear you'll be sticking around! Keep playing!
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I like how you slowly introduced the characters without really explaining who they were - it's fun figuring out how they were related to the persona. =D
And and! You watch Naruto too? =D
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AND HECK YES, I WATCH NARUTO TOO. 8D
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ooh, any favourite characters? =P
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(LOL, but a look at my userpics will pretty much tell you my ultimate favs, though I LOVE ALL OF THEM.)
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Like the darling aquarius_galuxy said, this is absorbing! You've captured the scattered feeling a person has when confused by a dream, those moments of pure panic, the struggle with acceptance of fate, then detachment... I love the elements you introduced and THE ENDING!!! Hit by a bus? Yowza! Terrific job! I can't wait to read more of your entries!
(Also, if you do decide to re-visit this and do some re-working of it... gimme a buzz, okay? I want to read it!! :D
Thank you so much for agreeing to be in the Showcase! I hope we see you around the Flame often!
Keep writing!
Kathy
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You're most welcome! It's definitely my pleasure to be doing the Showcase and I'm so very glad you accepted the invite.
Gosh, I love revisions *good thing because I always seem to have do my stuff over and over and..* :D
I'm happy to hear you'll be sticking around! Keep playing!
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