"Almost Lunch" with Guys and Dolls

[amymc1986]

Well, I had lunch yesterday with some of the girls and guys from my church. What fun and I think that I became the object of some of their laughter. We went to Moxy's on Yonge St., close to the corner of Yonge and Sheppard. I tend not visit that one, as every experience I've had there has not been overly plesant with regards to their service. I

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Lunch!

[shali1]

Hey Amy,
I read this poem on a very empty stomach, so you could imagine what rumbles were going on in my tummy. However, although the poem was about chips and salsa; all I thought about was a Crunch chocolate bar. This was because of the repetitive words spoken at the end of this very short poem- “crunch, crunch, crunch”. So I guess this poem accomplished what it was intended to -it made me think of food, and food I went after.
Shali

[noellemorris]

The picture is adorable :)
The sound is especially important in this poem. Onomatopeias (I believe that is how the word is spelled) are interesting poetic devices. They create sensory experiences that are figuratively present. I looked at the rhyme scheme (6 / 8 / 8 / 5) but did not find anything astronomical. I am impressed that the poet found four words that ended in -unch to finish each line.
I wonder what the poet would have said had they not been crunching during the last line.

[beth_may]

FYI: Last year, by English prof was adamant about the usage of the word bunch. Did you know the only proper way to use "bunch" is when referring to fruit? Haha.

Anyways, this poem is short and simple. And I agree with you about the structuring of the poem. By leaving it in a single line, the poem gives us clues about how the lunch was eaten.

[rositageorgieva]

I don't know about the crunchy poem --it sounds like a bad poetry to me --but the photograph of the girl is poetry, a very good one.