Interlude - New Fic: The Ten Truths (part 2 of 3)

[amyross]

The Master glares through narrowed eyes. He doesn’t see why he should play the Doctor’s game. But then … there are so many questions. And even better … a chance to match wits with the only mind to equal his. They’ve played before but the Honesty patches have added new rules to the game.

The Master gives the Doctor a long look. “Why, exactly, didn’t

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[amyross]

Be excited - IMO, the last part is the best.

Definitely the slashiest, anyway.

Darn. No more hints!

[aralias]

you're using a very odd tense here (not just present, but a partilar form of prenset), but it does work, and i really like the premise. honesty is fun :)

i particularly liked the comment about martha screwing up the master's life even after he left earth, and the doctor foolishly deciding to put on an honesty patch. good stuff.

[amyross]

It's a timeless tense ... being in the Vortex and all.

Just kidding. I was barely aware of it. I wish I could claim English is not my first language, but sadly, it is!

I know what you mean though. Rather than writing "The Doctor thinks ..." I write "The Doctor is thinking ..." and so on. It's just a particular "voice" I had when I wrote this. Narrative has never really been my bag, I've written far more in script form IRL.

I do think it works, though. In my head, it's not meant to "read" like anything else.

[aralias]

*grins* i laughed out loud at this: It's a timeless tense ... being in the Vortex and all.

just thought you ought to know ;)

[amyross]

Darn. Now you're making me wish I'd been smart enough to notice it right away. And put it in my summary. How smart would I have sounded?

You've probably not read my others, but if you have, do you notice it at all there?

You also made me notice another strangeness in the "voice". A lot of it is POV, albeit third person, but there are also a lot of narrative comments.

I could call this deliberate, too, saying that while we can glimpse their points of view, this is a private conversation and narrative comments are needed to truly understand it.

But we all know I'd be lying!

[amyross]

I'm so relieved you can see it that way ... this has bits of AU and crack about it, but mostly I wanted it to seem true.

I suppose for a fic where the theme is honesty, it's the least I can do :D

[boulette_sud]

This is so brilliant. I loved it :)