Heh, Probably not. So, it's not my favorite, but it's got some good stuff. The last stanza reads a bit like a run-on. But I like the suspense of the first stanza. I especially like the "coming / growing / maddening" set.
Thanks for the response. I know it's not my best, but I'll post a new update to explain.
Sexual? Hmmm... Well, I don't intend for the entire poem to be a quasi-veiled metaphor for sexual tension, though I did intend to use that device to get a certain set of feelings and expectations to heighten involvement in the situation.
That made me sound like a pretentious dick. Sorry. But I guess my answer is yes, but only as a tool in conveying a non-sexual feeling and story.
What ever happened to that poem of yours you said you'd send me?
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Heh, Probably not. So, it's not my favorite, but it's got some good stuff. The last stanza reads a bit like a run-on. But I like the suspense of the first stanza. I especially like the "coming / growing / maddening" set.
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Sexual? Hmmm... Well, I don't intend for the entire poem to be a quasi-veiled metaphor for sexual tension, though I did intend to use that device to get a certain set of feelings and expectations to heighten involvement in the situation.
That made me sound like a pretentious dick. Sorry. But I guess my answer is yes, but only as a tool in conveying a non-sexual feeling and story.
What ever happened to that poem of yours you said you'd send me?
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