Blight - Because that's what Twilight is: a disease.
Surprise! I am complaining about my own stuff. And now I shall rip my own story to shreds. Well, what little of the story that I have, really.
Premise: Aveyond/Twilight crossover with "Edward" and "Jacob" rolled together into one person, thus eliminating the love triangle, and hopefully with more plot than "woe is me, our love is forbidden".
First off, the title. "Blight" has nothing to do with the story whatsoever, so that is already a bad sign. For one, Blight means "disease". As the story is just a "fixed" version of Twilight starring a different cast of characters in a different universe, it has nothing to do with diseases. Not to mention that "blight" literally means a disease that infects PLANTS. Our heroes are not dryads or Tolkien's Ents or fairies or any creature that would be deeply affected by plant disease, that word does not describe the story at all.
Now the story. The setting is a Final- Fantasy or Kingdom Hearts-esque world where modern day technology like phones and laptops are available, but is powered by magic or some other mystical forces, fantasy creatures like dragons and fairies are the norm, and some people still use medieval weapons like swords and axes. For that I actually have more liberty at what is possible and what isn't because hey, RPG-style magic is sort of hard to explain with logic.
Vampires are replaced by "demons" because in this particular setting vampires are about as normal and common as you and I. The werewolves are replaced by this original dragon tribe, i.e they're not part of the Aveyond universe. The dragons, called the Ronnans, are higher-class dragons who could take on a human form.
Nothing in this story is set in stone because I don't exactly plan to write it down, but I already have major issues with important plot/setting elements.
The daevas, who take on the role of the "Cullens", are trapped in immortality because a part of their life force is sealed and thus could never be truly spent. That does not even begin to make any sense AT ALL.
Agas plays both Edward and Jacob. We know that Edward is the "pointless love interest" character, but Jacob's initial role was to inform Bella about the legend of vampires. Why on earth she needed to be told that is beyond me, but I digress. Keeping that in mind, that would mean that Agas would be blabbing on HIS OWN SECRETS while hoping that Rhen would not realize it or pay no heed to it. In fact, in what little plot that I have sketched out, that is precisely what happened. If that is not dumb as heck, I don't know what is. Although on the other hand, I could argue with the saying "the best place for a thief to hide in is the police station", that is by blabbing he is actually directing the attention AWAY from himself. After all, who in their right mind would give themselves away, right?
Yay for nitpicking. I have very little plot so I don't have much to rant about. Now for a trial prose.
Twilight started with Meyer's dream, a.k.a Chapter 13 of the first book, "The Confession". It's only right for me to tackle that scene first. So here's my take on the part that people lovingly dubbed "the meadow scene", sans meadow and sparkles because those are simply ridiculous.
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He leaned forward and touched my cheek. I couldn't help but flinch. Even though he had promised that he wouldn't hurt me and I trusted him, I was still scared.
He leaned closer to me and I instinctively backed away, panicking. What is he going to do? My heart pounding so hard in my chest now that I was sure he could hear it. For a moment we just stared at each other, neither moving or speaking.
"Do I dazzle you?" he suddenly whispered, breaking into a grin.
Good grief, even his voice is different!
It took me a while to process his words, because the only thing I could focus on at the moment was how his voice sounded like it was dripping with poison and how his large fangs made him look even more demonic than he already is. He actually looked like he was considering to eat me for dinner. I hurriedly shoved the thought out of my head.
When my brain had finally registered that he had just asked me a question, my only reaction was to stare at him some more because I wasn't sure what to answer. Was he being sarcastic? Was he trying to make a joke? Or was he actually being serious?
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And then he eats her.
No, just kidding. AV demons don't eat people. Except for Aesma.
SARCASM IS AWESOME!!!
I know that "Do I dazzle you" line is probably not from that chapter, but I think this is a perfect place to put it in to make fun of both the line and scene. Agas is being all muhahahahahaha evil and Rhen is scared half to death because Agas is a demon. The "I" there is Rhen, in case you didn't realize it yet. Like I said, he's being sarcastic about the "Do I dazzle you" line. He KNOWS she is scared to death and he is very much aware that he looks scary so he's doing that on purpose.