Through my lens, there is a nice moral about new technology in here. I like it very much. There is a simplistic tone much like Aesop, but with a modern sardonic bite that makes it more entertaining to read.
Thank you, my primary goal was to make the story sound "genuine" as opposed to in genuinely or abitrarily modern or simplistic. I get closer to this with each one I scribe.
However, if you did notice a line or phrase that didn't scan correctly or that had that trite feeling, I could really use knowing which ones.
I need to take out War and Peace and replace it with something archaic. Other than that, I am pretty happy with it too.
So if you have this great notion about reptiles (not that I blame you), do you think you could list a few things about their superiority? This could be a calling :)
My writings usually have a title along the lines of "write a ..." as per my assignments, which I also post. It's a good exercise and I am getting better at them :)
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However, if you did notice a line or phrase that didn't scan correctly or that had that trite feeling, I could really use knowing which ones.
glad you like it :)
-FW
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So if you have this great notion about reptiles (not that I blame you), do you think you could list a few things about their superiority? This could be a calling :)
-FW
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glad you liked it.
-FW
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