Second chance Week 1 LJ Idol

[aniron_iorhael]

Panic! Heart hammered in a tiny chest. Leaves smacked into a twitching and furry face. Everything was a blur. Claws dug into the ground and into wood as it scurried over branches and leaves, seeking escape. There must be an escape! Frantic eyes glanced left and right but the only logical way was to always go forward. The forest was heavily dense,

Comments

[i_17bingo]

That was intense. I was holding my breath toward the end there, hoping she'd make it (even though I love foxes), and felt a little deflated when she didn't. Well done!

[aniron_iorhael]

Thank you very much!

[rayaso]

This was great, focusing on the mouse's experience. I was hoping for an escape, but Nature isn't that sentimental.

[beldarzfixon]

Well written, with great action. Was easy to picture, since I've been watching "Planet Earth II" on TV lately.

[dmousey]

Poor mousey. :( I wonder which of my many cousins you just killed! (Hehehehe) The action in this write was very well done! Hug and peace~~~

[eternal_ot]

The pace was perfect. I was rooting for the mouse. But Alas!As you very well said "A vicious cycle that all nature lived by, a law that was irrefutable and undeniable." A nice take!

[aniron_iorhael]

I was rooting for her, too, and with a different ending that I originally had in mind, I went with the more realistic approach, instead.