Comments | ann2059: a fic

ann2059

a fic

Aug 30, 2007 00:00

This is my first attempt to write a fic. Also, note that English is not my mother tongue, so please, be understanding. Any feedback and constructive critiqe will be appreciated.

Special thanks go to

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mgs, snakexotacon, fanfic

Comments 13

yamitami August 30 2007, 00:29:02 UTC

I LOVE THE INTERACTION. Can't wait for more ^^

ann2059 August 30 2007, 08:04:04 UTC

Thank you ^^ The main objective of this fic was to focus chiefly on the interaction between those two. So don't be surprised if I skip some of the main plot twists and replace them with some Snake/Otacon themes xD

crazybird027 August 30 2007, 04:50:01 UTC

This was terrific! Please continue!

ann2059 August 30 2007, 08:05:45 UTC

Thanks! The next chapter is already in the making. Hope to finish it soon ^^'

nekopico_pen August 30 2007, 22:55:24 UTC

oh yeah finish it soon please!

_dahne_ August 30 2007, 09:17:10 UTC

Nice! I love to see the game events from a different viewpoint. English isn't your first language? Damn! I'm impressed 0_o

ann2059 August 31 2007, 08:50:05 UTC

Yup. My first language is Polish and since there's no Polish mgs slash community (none that I heard of) I had no choice but to write something in English. I'm still working on improving my linguistic skills so I hope my writing will get better over time.
Thanks for reading ^^

otabox August 30 2007, 10:24:59 UTC

Like I said before, great job on this one. I've been looking for another Snake x Otacon fic to become obsessed over. x]

greekhoop August 31 2007, 02:14:32 UTC

Wow, I really enjoyed that. I was a little unsure when I first saw how you were going to be structuring it, since I don't think that alternating POVs work very well most of the time. But you did a great job of capturing two distinct, individual voices.

I can't put my finger on why, exactly, it works for me so well, but you've got a real ear for pacing, too. In the first section, the long spliced together phrases followed by a sharp, almost staccato "I'm ready, Snake…" actually gave me a little shiver when I read it.

Great work. I'm looking forward to more.

ann2059 August 31 2007, 08:57:19 UTC

I'm glad you liked it ^^
When I first thought about writing a fic I knew right form the beginning that it should be from Otacon's POV. But the picture of the whole incident wouldn't be complete without Snake's point of view so here's the result.
It's nice to know that I didn't screw it up ^^'