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annabirmingham

Friday at the sandbox - Part 1 (June challenge)

Jun 18, 2011 21:33

For the June challenge on bmm-drabbles 'Take your fandom to work'.

Summary - Modern day AU/AU. Ennis, Jack, kids, a playground... I am currently a stay-at-home-mom so this scenario is based on a setting I know all too well :)

Warnings - none
Length - 400 words
Feedback - please!

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fridayatthesandbox, oneshot

Comments 46

annabuffy June 19 2011, 11:10:42 UTC

Very cute and sweet. But, you can't stop there. We need to know more. How did the extra latte "date" go? Did he like the pie? Did the kids play well together?

annabirmingham June 19 2011, 12:25:24 UTC

Thanks Anna! 'Extra latte date' - i like that! I may steal it for the title of the next part...
Anna x

trekfan June 19 2011, 15:42:55 UTC

next part (she said hopefully) oooo I hope there is a next part :D

lightning070 June 19 2011, 13:43:21 UTC

What a sweet story! I loved it!
I agree with previous poster, a continunation of this story would be great!

annabirmingham June 19 2011, 17:48:26 UTC

Thanks so much! I'll see what I can do about a sequel...
Anna x

trekfan June 19 2011, 15:42:12 UTC

lovely Anna (like your stories are) my only question is, um THE END????

oh come on this SCREAMS to be expanded. :D

I had to say something.

Hugs
Linda

annabirmingham June 19 2011, 17:49:29 UTC

Thanks Linda! Umm, yeah, I may well need to do a part 2 to this. I admit I'm kind of intrigued as to what happens too!
Anna x

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annabirmingham June 19 2011, 17:51:10 UTC

Thanks for reading! I do find it easier to chat to strangers if you have kids. The conversations I've had at random playgrounds have been fun! I think the guys need to come back next week and try to actually talk to each other!
Anna x

roby100 June 19 2011, 17:45:41 UTC

I loved everything: Bobby who doesn't help, Jack making plans, Ennis smiling, the sweetness of the story. Yes, I really like your writing and I think you know it!

I didn't like the word "end". I know that you are busy with the most important job in the world but if you have spare time and you really don't know what to do..... I wouldn't mind to know what happens next time they meet :)

Thanks so much for sharing.
A big hug
Roby

annabirmingham June 19 2011, 17:52:12 UTC

Aw, thanks Roby! I do get a bit of free time here and there so I'll do my best to write a bit more of this. 400 words at a time seems a lot more do-able than a 'proper' chapter :)
((hugs)) back
Anna x