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Confession of Pain - Teen (Snarry , Lucius)

Feb 08, 2007 22:35

Title: Confession of Pain
Author: sapphiretragedy
Rating: Teen
Challenge: 27 Dark!Harry/Severus Lucius as slave (servant). For thematic_hp.
Characters: Harry/Severus, Lucius
Warnings: Dark!Harry
Notes: Feedback is always welcome.

( Revenge is a confession of pain. - Latin proverb )

teen, dark!harry, snarry, lucius, challenge

Comments 9

timour February 9 2007, 17:03:03 UTC

Brilliant, absolutely brilliant.
I'm having a shitty day and that has made me feel much better.
Thank you

sapphiretragedy February 9 2007, 17:11:06 UTC

Thank you! That is a wonderful compliment. I'm glad you enjoyed this fic. And I'm very appreciative for the feedback. It really means a lot.

lothy February 10 2007, 23:08:36 UTC

Very nice! :) As the person who came up with the prompt: thank you.

sapphiretragedy February 13 2007, 17:45:07 UTC

Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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sapphiretragedy February 13 2007, 17:45:33 UTC

Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

xos2ed February 16 2007, 03:30:55 UTC

im suprised you ended it there. There didnt seem to be much time for harry or lucius character development...
and there are many questions unanswered like what will happen to harrys personality? are narcissa and draco going to be safe? etc.

but it really was amazing. i love how harry didnt know what he was doing until after he became voldemort. oh irony... XD

sapphiretragedy February 16 2007, 04:18:16 UTC

I wasn't interested in a large story with plot. You'll find most of my stories aren't really strong in plot. I'm more interested in character study; which I feel this was. There could have been more to make it stronger. Of that I agree. This though was meant to be a slice of life kind of thing. Maybe I didn't pull it off the way I thought I did,though? I don't know ( ... )

xos2ed February 24 2007, 04:39:02 UTC

"This though was meant to be a slice of life kind of thing"

I understand what youre saying completely and thats probabally how the story was meant to be written, but i feel like a slice of life would be in the middle of lucius serving harry, but you start at the beginning. i dont know if that was on purpose or not.

I almost enjoy that delacate balance of picking when to end a story - and you do that well. The questions that i mentioned - and i might just be in a different mood then i was when i first reviewed - but left up to the imagination, the reader can have fun with them, and it leaves an imprint of your story in their mind. When you answer the questions as an author, it leaves room for disappointment, but that doesnt mean you cant answer them. I guess it just depends.

this really didnt have much of a point, im just discussing the different views inside my head - and apparently on this screen.

ill try to think of a more coherent reply

~loves~

timour October 25 2007, 12:14:01 UTC

Just read this feeling oddly comforted by it but not sure if i'd ever read it before only to find my comment at the end. Seems i find it when i'm having a shit day, so thanks once more.