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annieroo2

FIC - United Front: Ch. 5 - Anamnesis ~Renji/Ishida ~R

May 31, 2009 23:29

“Ishida… Ishida, wake up. We gotta get goin’. The Arrancar are on the move again and we need to get our squads and prep before we go.” Renji shook him before kissing him on the back of his head.

He was so groggy and tired, Ishida felt as if he must have just fallen asleep, but like most good soldiers he was up and dressed and out the door in less ( Read more... )

renji, ishida, bleach, renishi, fanfic

Comments 12

madrona_8 June 1 2009, 08:40:59 UTC

Wow, I saw the warning but that's not what I expected at all. But, it's okay, I can deal. Hey, we've got Soul Society! I do love how he maintains his voice while he's dying. I had just been thinking about this fic and was wondering when it was going to pop up again. Yea!

annieroo2 June 1 2009, 16:20:08 UTC

Oh man, I thought the warning would be enough. I hate to give people bad surprises cause I know how much they suck for me.

I'm happy it didn't throw you off so badly that you wanted to pelt me with rotten fruit. ;)

And yeah this is Bleach so... don't worry too much.

Oh thank you for saying Ishida maintained his voice. I was so worried that was not going to fly with readers since he was dying.

*laughs* Yeah I've been having a bit of writers irritation, in that I can't seem to make it work on this story as much as I'd like. I'm still plugging away whenever I get the inspiration and I hope to have it finished in 3 more chapters barring any unforeseen sit jaunts. ;)

Do I see Blast!Ishida there in your icon? I love her so much. I wish she would do just one tiny RenIshi too. *giggles*

Thank you for reading and taking the time to leave such a nice review. I really appreciate it. :D

madrona_8 June 1 2009, 19:56:46 UTC

Yes, it is Blast!Ishida from the swimsuit layout. I have this with a blue background too but I figured red goes with your layout ;)
I just realized I need to make one with Ishida/Renji. I already have Ishida/Ichigo and Ichigo/Renji. That picture gives us so many oppurtunities!
I'm sure the next chapters will be awesome as always!

annieroo2 June 9 2009, 04:51:30 UTC

*laughs* I love that you chose it match my layout. That's so cute.

Yum, RenIshi swimsuit... Um what was I saying? *g*

I really need a new RenIshi icon too. One of these days I'm gonna find one I love.

Thanks for the vote of confidence. *crosses fingers* Here's hoping I don't let you down. *cheers* ;)

hu3long2 June 1 2009, 10:56:23 UTC

Darn, forgot to read the warnings.

In some ways, this feels like a transition chapter, by summarizing the previous events and transitioning us to the reality of the war. I liked it, don't get me wrong-- it's ties the events together very neatly and is a little break from the tension and excitement of the previous chapters, as much as the middle of a war zone can lack tension, probably because so much of it is actually interior.

I liked the orderliness of Ishida's thoughts, though I do have one quibble-- that he was thinking this in a fighting zone during/between battles. But I've never really been in that kind of adrenalin situation, so perhaps everything becomes preternaturally clear at that point, including his greatest preoccupations.

annieroo2 June 1 2009, 16:04:31 UTC

EEP! I'm sorry. This is Bleach, though. The good guys don't ever really die. ;) I promise.I don't have any experience myself in a war zone, and I only have one opinion on the subject, be he told me that after extended time having your life threatened a lot of guys get kind of inured to the horrors of battle and a guy can tend to distract himself with things to alleviate the horror around him ( ... )

hu3long2 June 2 2009, 02:58:02 UTC

I like how this gets longer and longer! I think in terms of turning point for me, introducing Ryuuken really changed this from an experiment in smut-- and the emotions associated with sex-- to a fic that takes canon and rolls with it!

I wasn't turned off at all by this chapter! I really liked it, it was just the setting that perturbed me slightly about halfway through when the part of me that likes the 'i's dotted and the 't's crossed kicked in, wondering why Ishida was thinking of Renji while fighting. And I don't think more needs to be written about the actual battles of the war, since you've already laid the groundwork in this chapter, and this fic is about the interior and private lives of a Bleach couple anyway. But I really did enjoy this chapter, and I'm looking forward to more!

annieroo2 June 9 2009, 04:57:42 UTC

*laughs* Yeah Ryuuken demanding a place in the story changed this from a three chapter PWP to probably 8 or 9 chapters. I sort of wished I could have kept my original idea cause this is a lot harder. ;)

I am happy you liked it overall though. I'm pretty sure I've got the next chapters fairly set, so hopefully it will still be enjoyable as it goes on.

Thanks again for your review. :D

vayshti June 3 2009, 14:09:47 UTC

I am *very* glad that I know this is just a chapter and not the end - because if it was I'D CATCH A PLANE AND COME OVER THERE AND THROTTLE YOU ( ... )

annieroo2 June 9 2009, 05:23:12 UTC

*kicks LJ* I replied to your comment days ago. I have no idea what the hell happened to it. Grrr! Anyway...

I loved your comments. You made me laugh so hard when I first read it. You know though I'd love it if you hopped a plane and came for a visit, but please don't kill me, cause you know this IS Bleach... I promise it'll be okay... eventually

I can't tell you how much I appreciated your comments on your accidents. I am such a wimp when I'm in pain or overwhelmingly stressed; all I do is cry. And I know that would be completely out of character for Ishida, so I had to go with another opinion. So I'm really happy this worked for you.

*huge sigh of relief* That was my very first fight scene and I agonized over it for... well way too long. I am ecstatic the energy and desperation came through. I was REALLY worried that it was maybe a bit flat.

I hope where it goes next works for everyone, especially given there aren't that many people who even read RenIshi. I always feel like I need to do better just because the reader pool is so ( ... )

nehalenia July 19 2009, 08:02:22 UTC

Oh man, that was painful! I'm not sure why I didn't read this back when you first posted -- maybe I wasn't up to character death -- but I'm glad I came back and found this. Oh man, Uryuu! Wah! Are you going to continue this series? I'd love to know if he really dies and if so, if Renji finds him in SS. Poor babies!

annieroo2 July 19 2009, 08:42:56 UTC

Not that I'm happy I upset you, but it was supposed to be painful, so for that I'm relieved I at least accomplished what I set out to do.

Ishida's death was not a part of the original outline, Renji was supposed to get hurt and laid up for a while, so Ishida could play nurse. But it would not be written no matter what I tried, so instead I went with what seemed so easy to write. I don't know what it is about that poor boy that everyone including Kubo has a need to torture him.

Oh yes I definitely plan on finishing this, it's just taking me a bit longer than I would like. As a matter of fact I just got chapter 6 and 7 back from my beta today. It will take me a bit to tackle all the changes and get a second read through done, but rest assured you will find out what happened to Ishida and I hope it doesn't disappoint. ;)