Fic: Observations

[anon_j_anon]

Title: Observations
Author: jAnon
Pairings: Kirk/Spock
Rating: R
Disclaimer: I have not profited monetarily from this venture, nor do I claim original ownership of the characters and setting.
Summary: First Officer Spock comments on life aboard the Enterprise and his service under Captain James T. Kirk.

Many thanks to the_moonmoth for proofreading and comments.

Comments

[danahid]

Woohoo! I'm incredibly impressed that you managed to post it all in one go. It gives me an excuse to re-read from the beginning. Yay, and thank you.

[vellum]

squeee!! will you also be putting annotations up on lj? i haven't been able to find time to crack into it yet, i found observations on ff two nights ago and swallowed it up in hours, and then, you know, needed sleep and all. i think i previously avoided your pimpage on the kink meme simply because it was ff.net.

ok, so, proper feedback, since i didn't on ff: i really really really enjoy this. i think my favorite kind of fic format, since it's so rare, is the moments-in-the-life-of, where it's all-encompassing and continues beyond a couple of entries and builds a whole story instead of being a one-shot, and i really enjoyed being able to feel that all of their relationships take time, from kirk and spock's starfleet manual argument to, well, chapter 115, and even from mccoy's, "wait, you think he's xenophobic?" to spock seeing him as a nice guy to hang around with (though i wish i saw more from that aspect

[anon_j_anon]

There will be more Bones & Spock outtakes soon. It's necessary, and the reason will be evident in the future. Everything from the 'City' arc to now has been extremely K/S centric, laying down a deeper foundation for their relationship. Now that's done, I can afford to focus a bit more on the crew. I personally also dislike it when a fiction focuses purely on K/S and puts the other crew as a sort of chorus, rather than characters in their own right. Writing from first person makes that hard to accomplish, because that implies that the narrator has an actual relationship with other characters. Thankfully, though the point of view is strict, the format is extremely flexible

[masterpenguin82]

Woot! I've seen you post about this when it was on ff but i've been resisting it (for no reason other than i'm not keen on ff and at that point it was unfinished and I've had to make a new rule about not starting any more wips...)

Now off to read this monster - 115 chapters, whoa that's a lot!

Will return with an actual comment on the story - somewhere.

[anon_j_anon]

Sorry, but it's not finished, even after 115 chapters. I don't know how long it's going to be, but it's actually far from finished. I'm sorry if I've mislead you in any way...

But please don't let that prevent you from reading. I'd love to hear feedback, and I promise you that I will finish this story. It's something that I need to do-- I think the reason will be evident in the end. Just to you give you some more reassurances, I have everything carefully plotted and the ending already in mind.

Thank you for your comment.

[masterpenguin82]

I figured it wasn't totally finished, and that it was only this arc that is done. but that's okay I don't mind reading stories in arcs like this - particularly one's as long as this, it's kinda like a series of books - there's always a bit of a wait. However, if I know that the stories gonna be updated regulalry i'm more inclined to read it. Having said that i've spent the last hour or so on your fic and am really enjoying what i've read so far.

[masterpenguin82]

Ha! Finished all of the Observations Arc this morning - and was not disappointed! I like the effort you put into the slow development of the relationships - not just Spock and Kirk, but the way you included the other secondary characters too.

Will wait for a few more chapters for the Equality arc before I start that one - I have bigbang fics to finish reading!

[coeurdesoleil]

I only discovered Observations about a week ago and at first I was a bit wary of reading it since it's such a massive WIP, but I'm really glad I was unable to resist the temptation because this story is EXTRAORDINARY. I just caught up with your last updates this week-end and I have loved every second I have spent reading this. I'm delighted that you decided to post the whole thing on lj too, since I tend to just lurk on ff.net (I mostly lurk on lj too, but this story is too good to not comment on!)

I really, really love the deliciously slow-building K/S as well as the character development more generally speaking, the careful plotting (especially your very clever TOS rewrites!) and just how intelligent your writing is all around. As much as I adore your take on K/S, the best thing about this fic is the way you're using actual science and maths in the story (I'm not sure I understand all of it, but it's still awesome!) and above all how you're constantly including reflections on and references to history, literature, art and

[anon_j_anon]

Thank you! I hope I can keep the quality from flagging. Also, I'm very glad to hear that you enjoy the mathematics/science/history/literature/art/linguistics sections. For me, those are just as important as the the growing relationships between Spock and all the crewmembers of the Enterprise.

I'm sorry I haven't been keeping up on 'Annotations,' but this monster fiction kind of takes up all my time. By the time I'm done writing chapters, I don't have that much energy to write annotations, at least not lately. If there's anything that's unclear, please comment on it and I'll add annotations.

[lorelei76]

You know what's awesome about being home with the flu and other nasty chest infections?

I get to cuddle up on my bed with soup, tea, a laptop and EPIC FIC.

This is amazing. Seriously - the slow progression of Spock's pov from "More Vulcan than Thou" to "I just got sexed up by Kirk." I adored how he goes from stiff, formal language to slyly humorous/affectionate/EMOTIONAL.

I was so mad I hit ch 115: I wanted more. You're brilliant and I can't wait to read the next bit.

[anon_j_anon]

...(I am sort of cringing). You're another one of those people who wishes this fiction would go on forever... it may as well, given the number of chapters I need to write to get to the end. But it will end, make no mistake about that. For various reasons, I really need to complete this, not write an infinite number of chapters.

In any case, thanks very much for commenting and I hope you feel better soon.