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i'm a big fan of your writing but i think sometimes your sentence structure and phrasing makes it difficult to parse out the meaning and breaks up the flow of what you're trying to say.

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I'll try to look out for that more! I know it's a recurring problem, especially when sentences start to sprawl out. Thank you!

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your style is so delicate and beautiful and you have great command of language! sometimes though i feel your work lacks hmm a strong climax, even when there's great emotional tension throughout (i'm thinking the krislayhan in particular) there isn't really a peak, so sometimes the fic ends with less impact than it could. overall though i think you're v talented and always look forward to reading your writing. :)

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ahh thank you so much, I think this really articulates the biggest problem I have with my own writing - I tend to gloss over or smooth things over too much, and end up coming off too subtle or losing the pacing. If you had any suggestions I'd love to hear them!

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so again going off of the krislayhan, bc it's the fic by you i've read most recently and probably my favorite, i think some of the strongest images and moments are blended/grouped together in what feel like summaries rather than actual scenes. and i think if you focused more attention on individual events and wrote them out in more detail, that'd give the reader the time to digest what's happening and also lend it more weight. given the plot in that fic, all the tension and emotional drama is technically already there, it just feels abridged sometimes.

writing this now i realize that a lot of it is also just stylistic choice and i'm always kind of loath to comment on personal style, i like that your writing is so moody and atmospheric, but anyway those are my 2 cents!

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Like you said, with the krislayhan it's somewhat related to the nonlinear storytelling, but I think it's something I'm generally guilty of and do want to fix, so this helps a lot! Thank you :)