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☃ ❄ END OF YEAR FEEDBACK MEME ❄ ☃
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[itachibana13]

itachibana13 @ semecomplex

[itachibana13]

i hadn't read any of your fic, so i clicked your masterlist out of curiosity and now i'm like crying in laughter at "have you all night, vodka straight". drunk slutty parties are my favourite thing ever and i completely lost it at the parts with the picture frame and the lightswitch so a+ omg.

[itachibana13]

you have a really good grip on humor and i enjoy a lot of your fics (specifically 'if you're from china, why are you korean?' and 'have you all night, vodka straight'), however i find that your more serious fics are lacking when it comes to emotion. for example 'we all fall down' - i couldn't become invested in the fic because i found it very clinical/not descriptive enough and there wasn't enough characterisation for me to become emotionally invested in jongin and what he was going through.

[itachibana13]

omg this is probably an useless comment but i just want to say i really love if you're from china, why are you korean? really really really really

and we all fall down just takes the cake really. i like the way you write.

[itachibana13]

as much as i love we all fall down, i don't buy the kids' crimes? idg why they are even there. but i love lukaistalfan bffery sfm. i adore your crack fics. i love your sekai and selu and selukai and you need to expand your police/mafia au just bc ;~; and write more sekai pls because beautiful

(tbh i'm just deprived and this is some kind of a shameless plea)

[itachibana13]

the first thing of yours that i ever read was 'We All Fall Down', and i remember feeling all at once so in awe and so jealous that someone had been able to write this monster fic that somehow put together all my feelings for the sort of "death arena" trope that was popularized by hunger games, and then made it NEW (and better lol). the thing that i would offer about that story is that while i think you really captured the emotional turmoil between the competitors, i wished that there was more to work from with the sehun/jongin relationship. I got that Jongin wanted to come home for Sehun, but why is their connection so strong? conveying emotion like this has to do with little things, usually from the past, that can be mentioned in passing (or in whole flashback scenes, if you're feeling ambitious). our emotions about certain people or subjects are like big collectives of our experience, and while i think you have excellent characters, i think you need to go a little deeper into their past for some depth in their relationships with

[itachibana13]

i think i've only read "we all fall down" from you, but i enjoyed it. i loved your world building. it was fresh and inventive and engaging. however i think there was a real lack of emotional depth in your story. i don't know if it was intentional, that you wanted to keep the narrative voice dry and emotionless, but i didn't feel for your characters. but i still thought it was an interesting fic.