Comments | antonia_zar: you are the hole in my head - (Elena

antonia_zar

you are the hole in my head - (Elena - Post 4x09)

Dec 15, 2012 19:21

Title: you are the hole in my head
Fandom: The Vampire Diaries
Rating: PG-13/T
Word Count: 1098
Characters: Elena-centric, references to Damon/Elena. Bonnie, Caroline, Stefan and Tyler make cameo appearances.
Spoilers: Occurs post-4x09
Summary: The bond forces Elena to stay away from Damon, but it doesn’t stop her thoughts from straying towards him ( Read more... )

damon/elena, elena gilbert, fanfiction, damon salvatore

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upupa_epops December 16 2012, 01:06:54 UTC

Her feelings are real. They’re real. It’s real. It has to be. Anything else and it all falls apart.

:((( Elena just goes back, picks the things she knows for sure, and tries to build her world anew around them. This girl is a survivor.

Driving away feels right and wrong at the same time. He said it would make him happy, but she saw the heartbroken look in his eyes.

OUCH. Even her dilemma subtly turns into a Damon dilemma. Does she want to come back to him because SHE wants it, or because he looked heartbroken?

He said he was setting her free, but she's never felt more trapped.

I like the way you build this story on paradoxes.

Elena doesn't know what's real anymore, so she goes back to her last experience as a human and jumps.

Elena Gilbert: killing herself over and over and over again, every time she wants a fresh start :(.

Elena takes out her phone and calls Damon. He just told her to leave, not to call, not to feel not to think about him. This action is hers.Does she do it because she wants to, or because he looked ( ... )

antonia_zar December 16 2012, 01:24:21 UTC

Wow, thanks for such a detailed review <3

Yeah, it ended up pretty dark. I actually had no real plans when I was writing it and just kind of let it go where it wanted to? I just wanted to show Elena trying to pull herself together, but having the sire bond make that nearly impossible for her to do.

OUCH. Even her dilemma subtly turns into a Damon dilemma. Does she want to come back to him because SHE wants it, or because he looked heartbroken?I'm glad you noticed that. I was trying to be subtle with that, and I'm glad it worked ( ... )

upupa_epops December 16 2012, 01:35:30 UTC

And you saw my ambiguous ending too. Very smart :)

I'm an English major :P.

You do some pretty clever things here :). With the ambiguity and the paradoxes. And I like your characterization. I'd love to see more fic from you!

antonia_zar December 16 2012, 01:39:05 UTC

That makes sense, then. English majors are good at reading way too much into stuff :)

I tried? Again, I haven't written fiction (before this week) in a good ten years, so I'm glad it worked for you? I'll definitely keep writing. Once I get an idea? (Feel free to give me some, aside from D/E fic around 4x07/4x08 I have no idea).

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