Duty, Above All Else -- Interlude & Part II

[arabianred]

Alritey, bear with me here! I had a really hard time writing this, so any help/critique would be much appreciated! Both were longer than I intended, but I was having a hard time juggling how much plot to infuse (this is a spin off but I haven't posted the fic it spins off from).

Probably best to read Part 1 first, and then the Interlude, and

Comments

[venusorbit1]

OK give me a few...I have to re-read this a few times and then comment. This was so intense. LIke, really, really emotionally intense for me to read, so I need some time before I can break it down.

My initial reaction though is: LOVE.

But I can't move or think right now b/c I'm emotionally wiped. When I can go collect my eyeballs and brain, I can comment. Oh god, without the smut, I would be cracking open a bottle right now and weeping into it.

[arabianred]

Whew, I was really REALLY nervous about posting Part II. I was very tempted to go into hiding ...

It was super hard for me to subject the beloved senshi to everything, plus for me to juggle how much plot to give you guys w/o giving everything away but leaving you with just enough.

And ... I think I'm with you on the alcohol (and lucky me, I have beer, wine, and hard liquor sitting in my fridge).

Thank you so much for reading and commenting. I really do appreciate it (as writing this wiped me out, too)! Please feel free to tear it apart and let me know what I need to work on!

P.S. This "When I can go collect my eyeballs and brain, I can comment" cracked me up. I'm also floored I was able to have this effect!

[venusorbit1]

OK, I'm boinging bw 2 windows here, so forgive me if I'm skipping around

[arabianred]

THANK YOU THANK YOU x a gazillion for the awesome review. I was seriously going to do a 'post and run (and HIDE)' type thing.

Interlude:
You know, I've never thought about posting smut until I read your challenge. See what you've done to me?! The Theraflu made it easier to write more explicitly, and I'm glad you didn't think it was raunchy. Would definitely have to go back and rewrite if it were.

Thanks for the tip on all the POV switching. So often, it's all in my head I forget to step in the reader's shoes. And ...

I would start quoting but I'll look like a pervert.
LOL.

Part II:
Holy FUCKING shit you blindsided me
I'm so glad, because I really thought you had it all figured out, with the suicide mission comment.

I was uncomfortable reading about those parts because they were so visceral...that's a good thing.Oh, I was equally uncomfortable writing and editing them

[venusorbit1]

There's definitely a complicated world dying to be shared. I needed to get some of it out to keep it from clogging everything else in my head. I'm really glad you like the glimpses so far!!

Really, you should get it out of your head and share it with us. It's really intriguing and my favorite stories are usually ones with wonderfully drawn up, well-thought-out worlds where every detail seems to have an explanation behind it.

You'll definitely see more, since there is still lots to share! I'm trying to plant the seeds ...
AWWW yeah. Feel free to bounce ideas off of me! I love it!

The plot bunnies are exhausted and currently vacationing on a tropical island, drinking bloody marys, munching on the celery/carrot, and relishing your feedback. Perhaps some new Economics or Vegas Smut will persuade them to leave said exotic beach?? *nudge*
You MAY get one of these very soon!!!

Although ... your birthday IS coming up ... That is true! But ugh, don't remind me. I'm clinging to my mid-20s like white on rice

[arabianred]

I was worried what's in my head was going to be so complex that I was going to have way too many different story lines going on, but your comment made me rethink that ... since I am creating it new world, it should be complicated! I was thinking short sighted and only fic-wise and how I would tie everything together, which was becoming a daunting task.

AWWW yeah. Feel free to bounce ideas off of me! I love it!
I will probably be taking you up on that offer! Once again, totally happy to return the favor, any time! I can't thank you enough for all your help (plus the totally awesome plug)!

You MAY get one of these very soon!!!
I can't wait!!!

That is true! But ugh, don't remind me. I'm clinging to my mid-20s like white on rice.
LOL. You know what's funny?! I was just thinking the other day what the starting age was for mid-20s and realized I think I fall in that category. Although, I am loving every second, every minute of the 20s.

maybe take some more Theraflu and that will prod your muse!I am SUCH a wuss when it comes

[arabianred]

Ah, so glad you made it over here! I put a link to this site as an olive branch type of thing, for the SWIB faithful.

I flinched when I saw that you hadn't updated those stories in years.
I feel so guilty about leaving those two hanging, although I flinch when I re-read them. I started those so long ago, I feel like my writing has really shifted since then. Priority goes to the re-write of SWIB, but I don't think that will be coming soon, as I'm currently working on senshi/shitennou stuff. :/

But who knows, maybe inspiration from these will help get me moving on SWIB. Thanks for the kind review! :)

[jenbunny]

That was exceptionally well written. I loved the interlude of course and the rest of it too. It was really hard to read the torturing parts, the poor senshi ... the way you write brings everything to life. I could really feel the pain that each of them were going through, especially Venus ... like I said the entire story was exceptionally written. You did a fantastic job and I really love it.

[arabianred]

It was really hard to read the torturing parts, the poor senshi
It was definitely one of the hardest scenes I have ever written. Period. I didn't want to be overly graphic, but I thought a fair amount of vividness was necessary to convey the necessary emotions and ambiance. So this was me trying to walk that fine line.

the way you write brings everything to life
WOW. Thank you so much! I've been trying to work on better imagery, as I usually have a tendency to blow through parts and not explain things as well as I should.

Again, thank you so much for the wonderful review!! :)

[charliechaplin2]

OH...MY.... Your Interlude...Is quite the interlude! Jebus Jadeite seems to know how to use it! DAAAMNN! That was so incredibly effing HOT! And FOUR TIMES?! Blighty!!! He's so wonderful. THIS is why I love Jadeite.

And that end! That bittersweet ending! Oh, my heart just aches, for ALL the Senshi!! I loved the way you captured both Rei's pain and especially Mina's (you do really hone in on exactly what makes her such a great leader, and you do it in such a little amount of space. Wow).

I need something happy. Like NOW.

[arabianred]

OH...MY.... Your Interlude...Is quite the interlude! Jebus Jadeite seems to know how to use it! DAAAMNN! That was so incredibly effing HOT! And FOUR TIMES?! Blighty!!! He's so wonderful. THIS is why I love Jadeite.
LOL. Yes, he definitely knows how to use it and puts it to good use. I love the 'blighty' btw! And, I'm really glad you liked it! I must confess, I was equally nervous about writing the smut.

And that end! That bittersweet ending! Oh, my heart just aches, for ALL the Senshi!! I loved the way you captured both Rei's pain and especially Mina's (you do really hone in on exactly what makes her such a great leader, and you do it in such a little amount of space. Wow).
YES! Success! *pumps fist in air* (That's what I was hoping to achieve, and I usually can't do it concisely, either.)

THANK YOU THANK YOU!! ^^