Comments | aravistarkheena: Fic: It Smoldered; Tim/Tam; PG-13, Part 7/8

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Fic: It Smoldered; Tim/Tam; PG-13, Part 7/8

Sep 15, 2011 21:23

Title: It Smoldered
Part: 7/8
Author: Aravis Tarkheena
Pairing: Tim/Tam
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: Not sure yet. Nothing crazy.
Disclaimer: Not mine, everyone's legal
Chapter Length: 1,500w
Author's Notes: Written for the Women Love Fest. I picked Tam. ~<3 You get a ~1k chapter each day for the next week. Also for my Ducati table for dcu_freeforall. Prompt: ( Read more... )

pairing: tim/tam, pairing:het, fic:dcu, dcu_freeforall, fic

Comments 4

darthbatgirl September 16 2011, 02:43:32 UTC

Way to go Tam knocking out the bad guy . . well bad gal. And Tim really got Vilta's feathers ruffled now didn't he?

Wonderful part hon.

aravistarkheena September 16 2011, 03:41:44 UTC

Tam is awesome. I knew from the start I wanted her to save the day. <333 Tim may have pushed things a TOUCH too far. To be fair, he didn't realize Vilta was that on edge.

Glad you liked it! Last chapter tomorrow! Then it's dooooone. And it's only TWICE as long as I had intended. That's pretty good for me. :D

larsinger29 September 16 2011, 16:25:45 UTC

Wooo for Tam kickin' some ass! I love how you described Tam's actions, it was really a nice touch to have her in a sort of blackout stage while she defended herself and Tim. And then her reaction when she came back to herself was very natural.

I kept on yelling in my head at Tim that he was pushing Vilta a little too far, and that it wasn't good to back a scared animal in the corner. Lucky for him that he had Tam there to aid him! And good job on you for getting the audience engaged in this scene.

Well done, babe. I can't believe there's only one more chapter to go! Off to go read that now! :D

aravistarkheena September 19 2011, 23:49:24 UTC

Tam kicking ass was pretty much the POINT of this fic. The notes went:

PREMISE: Tam saves the day.

Then I went from there. :D

Writing action scenes is always so hard because things HAPPEN so much faster than a person can process or narrate them. It's difficult to pull off a scene like that because you want to get the right FEEL across, one of reflexive ACTION, and at the same time make clear what happened and why. It's a delicate balance and one I want to work harder on.

Yeah, Tim did push Vilta too hard. What you don't get, because this was all from Tam's POV, is that Tim was so invested in keeping Vilta's attention OFF Tam, that he pushed too hard.

I'm glad you liked it! <3