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araya_rose

Ashes in the Wind

Jan 07, 2009 21:24

Title: Ashes to Ashes
Author: Araya
Theme: Ashes
Genre: Angst
Rating: (G - NC-17) PG

Ashes to Ashes, dust to dust; May I pay the dues for the sins of my lust.

It is not over. I know that it is foolish to believe so; but my heart will not relinquish hope. Faith that my queen will rise above, belief that the senshi will overcome, determination that I can ( Read more... )

Comments 8

lovelylytton January 8 2009, 08:26:55 UTC

Makoto is so brave, even though her heart must be breaking... Very well written!

araya_rose January 8 2009, 17:33:20 UTC

Thank you! :)

luckie355 January 16 2009, 16:29:07 UTC

Wow. I've always pictured something like this, and you've put it into words in such a beautiful way. Just stunning.

araya_rose January 16 2009, 17:16:00 UTC

Thanks so much :D

mrcrybrilliance January 16 2009, 19:38:24 UTC

I'm really touched by the description of the sword being positioned over her womb.

I love how she decides to end herself after taking out Nephrite.

Beautifully done.

araya_rose January 16 2009, 20:19:04 UTC

Thank you ! :D

charliechaplin2 February 18 2009, 21:44:06 UTC

The fact that it's from the first person makes this so much more effective I think. Especially with this line:

"I will not allow him to have the last laugh."

This one really made you feel her anger, like it was her turning point.

Nice! (Or rather not nice, but very sad, which makes it very good!)

araya_rose February 23 2009, 03:12:56 UTC

I'm so glad because I really wanted to bring Makoto to life in her dying moments. She is so strong but yet, she's so hurt by his betrayal, but in the end, it is her strength that pulls her through but not enough where she can find the will to live. :)

Thanks !