It's too late for you and your white horse

[araya_rose]

Title : It’s too late for you and your white horse

Author : Araya

Theme : Fail

Genre : Angst (Do I write anything else?)

Rating : G

Now it’s too late for you and your white horse to come around

“What are you doing here Kunzite?”

He does not answer at first; but to Minako his silence is deafening. There is deep emotion stirring behind his ice blue eyes

Comments

[jpendizzle]

Minako is meeeeeean. lol Hey you totally stole the failure paragraph from In The Rain...except it's Rei and Nephrite...and a little different, but I'm still sueing you! =P Nice piece!

[araya_rose]

What can I say? You INSPIRE me!

But it is def similiar after I went back and read In the Rain, so I will happily change it if you like. :)

And thanks. :D

[jpendizzle]

Nah, it's fine. Great/Cool minds think alike. :)

[lovelylytton]

Your writing is amazing. I also like how hard she is, even when he shows emotion and tries to convince her of his love and asks for her forgiveness time and again. It is what makes her such a great warrior, I reckon, but it also makes her cruel. Thus: Very interesting characterisation of both him and her. I really enjoyed this.

[araya_rose]

I hope they don't seem to OOC. I really wanted to explore the effects of love. As they say, "love makes you do crazy things." I think Kunzite would be much more emotional towards Minako when it came to their relationship. As for Minako, I don't think that she would hold a grudge forever. I think his reincarnation is bring back painful memories and she just isn't sure what to do. Part of her wants to hurt him just as badly as he hurt her and I think part of her is scared of being hurt again.

As you can tell, I put alot of thought into this. haha.

Thank so much for your comments! I always enjoy them! :D And Yay for you joining the Circlet!! :D

[lovelylytton]

I think it makes perfect sense that he reacts strongly once he notices the extent to which she is not giving them another chance. And in that situation of desperation even stone-cold Kunzite must show some feeling. And Manga!Minako is more hesitant about trust and emotions, if it is about things that truely matter. So I don't think that they are OOC at all.

I am so happy to have joined the circlet, it seems like a fantastic place to work on one's writing in a friendly atmosphere. *smiles*

[mrcrybrilliance]

I like this, though I have a bit of a hard time with Kunzite downplaying what he did and calling it a "mistake." Quite a doozy of a mistake.

However, I did enjoy this piece. I like the anguish. It makes sense that the Senshi of Love would be so hurt by the betrayal of that love.

[araya_rose]

I agree with you. :) But I also have to wonder how any of the Shitennou could ever look the Senshi in the face. =P

Thanks so much for your review! :D

[charliechaplin2]

Really, if he thinks he had a chance of being forgiven then he really was a fool. It's interesting to see Kunzite with a bit of flawed humanity. He hasn't fully learned his lesson. In most fics, if one of them tries to mend the relationship it's Mina, while he pushes her away... I liked this one! It's a refreshing change.

[araya_rose]

Thanks so much!