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[araya_rose]

Title: Untitled
Author: Araya
Theme: "It is easier to forgive an enemy than to forgive a friend." -- William Blake
Genre: Drama
Version: (Anime, Manga, PGSM) - Manga
Rating: (G - NC-17) - G

"It is easier to forgive an enemy than to forgive a friend." -- William Blake She does not know why she came, much less why she was still there. The

Comments

[arabianred]

You know what I always admired about the way you write? You go after the present tense (which has me chickenshit), and you're able to make it work really well. Many of of the pieces I've read using the present tense have been disastrous--but not yours!

I like how Rei's father wants her forgiveness, as sickness/death can totally change a person's priorities, yet he was too proud to ask her himself. And, I like that she's not ready to give it yet. Also, I really like that she managed to lay into Kaidou, even for a bit, as ten years is truly a long time coming.

I love that Jade comes to her rescue, and in a bike!! Biker Jade (that's what Agent Halifax drives, but not because of the usual reasons ppl drive bikes) = mad love from me. ^_^

[araya_rose]

Thank you so much. :) I like present tense because I can really feel what is going to happen and how the characters will act. I guess I write that way because I have no idea what's going to happen until they react with one another. For me, it's like watching a movie. lol. When I start writing, I have a single goal in my mind and from there I fill in the blanks. When I began this, I knew Rei would meet Kaidou at a party and that Jade would save her in some way or another.

Thank you for your compliments. :) But honestly, I hate this piece. lol. I'm not even sure I will post it on SM_Monthly as I don't feel like fixing it and it was just a way to get me to fall back into writing again after such a crazy few weeks. Thank you so so so much for your support though! You keep me wanting to write!

[arabianred]

Hmmm ... interesting! I'm kinda the same way, kinda not. I just write and see where it takes me, and often I don't have an end or specific goal in mind. It makes it SUPER hard to finish things, because as soon as inspiration leaves, I don't have a way to fill in the gaps because there are no gaps to fill.

But, I can't do present tense--it simply doesn't work for me, so mad props to you for being able to pull it off. I guess I think of it in the present, but I have to write it in the past (kinda like I reflect back on what just happened). Oh gosh, I don't think I'm making sense. Haha.

Glad to see *points at loki's thread* that you're gonna explore this further!!

[araya_rose]

haha I know what you mean about inspiration leaving though, my problem is that I have a beginning and an end but have nothing to fill the middle in with. I have this sailor moon epic that i have a whole outline for and that i LOVE but just cant find the inspiration to fill in the blanks.

[araya_rose]

Oh I def think that Rei would eventually forgive her father. I think that she is just shocked and a little sad, though I doubt she'll ever admit that. I tried to show that when she paused but in all honesty, I don't think I executed nor wrote this fic as good as I could have.

But writing is always terrible at first after you take a long break!

Thanks so much Loki. :) I def am going to continue this. All this month I am going to focus on the Rei/her father/Kaidou relationship and maybe just a little Jadeite as well. ;)

[venusorbit1]

I really enjoyed this, in part due to Jade ex machina (what can I say? I'm a sucker for shitennou) and his awesome closing line, and the fact that yes, she has a new lover, and to me that's means he is a physical symbol that she is over Kaidou and his mind games, because anyone can say they are over someone, but to show it is a whole different story. That was kind of foggy but I hope that you get what I mean.

Also, it brings up the question of how much does one owe their parents, even when parent in question is not a very good one? This hit close to me because this exact situation has happened in my family a few times, and it's never pretty. People have all sorts of regrets on their deathbed, but it doesn't excuse shit behavior they exhibited towards their children in their lives. It's a tricky situation and I'm glad you chose to explore it.

Oh yeah plus motorcycle Jade + Rei = sexxy hawt

[araya_rose]

I'm sorry you've had to deal with things like that in your life. :( I could never imagine how difficult it must be.

But yes, I do think you are right that this is really showing that Rei's really not a part of this world and has moved on and good for her! But I will def explore their relationships more.

[venusorbit1]

Oh wasn't me. Was other family members. Thank God I haven't had to deal with that crap (yet).

Oh, and I meant that MY explanation of why I liked it was foggy, NOT your fic! Sorry about the misunderstanding. I just start typing wordz and sometimes I get my point across, but most of the time, not.
However, I won't say no to more from you!
:)

[araya_rose]

Oh I didnt think your replu was foggy at all!! haha, I guess my reply was because I was just explaining that I agreed with you about Rei and what not. :) ANd thank you!! This fic is by far one of the worst Ive written but IM trying to get back into writing again.

[sea_thoughts]

Ooh, burned. XD

But I do love the situation you've created here, it's really plausible. And Rei's accusation that her father was more paternal towards Kaidou than her stings so much, because it's true.

And then Jadeite comes speeding along to take her away from it all. Perfect.

[araya_rose]

Thank you so much. :)