Cut scenes from Ch 9

[archchic]

So, I'm working away, though slowly, on Ch 9 of AMOC.  I started and restarted three times before coming on a scene that felt right for the opening sequence, and it's 100% different than what's below.  Here are the two previous openings, in all their unfleshed glory...

First cut:
Despite Gaara’s warnings of the dangers of the desert, they reached

Comments

[leilia]

The second cut definitely needed to happen. We really don't need the mother/daughter bonding and it can be done in other ways that are little less detrimental to the flow. The first opening wasn't bad and it still may have useable aspects to it. It depends on if you want to go that way and if you plan on having any part of the plot depend on Sakura knowing the missed desert survival classes and/or the reasons why Gaara now has his people's trust

[kodukadvakch]

Hmm... I believe in the idea that no dropped scenes are bad; they just didn't fit with the story. Well, unless they were horribly written, or something like that, but I know you're a talented author who works hard to create something worth reading. Tidbits of stories, ideas that won't work, are all just 'deleted scenes' of a fiction.

The question here isn't whether or not you've done something right or wrong; it's whether or not you choose for that something to be right or wrong. You have to ask yourself: Where is this story going? Is it really relevant to add in all of the other characters' interactions? What will build on this story and advance it in a direction I want it to go