Pistol-whipped by my own story…

[archchic]

Jenn: I just want to skip to Sunagakure!
Chapter 9: Hah! You wish loser, write me properly dammit!
Jenn: But I’m tired of traveling! I want to get to the good stuff!
Chapter 9: I DEMAND you write me, biotch! Stop slacking off!
Jenn: ~whimper~ ...jerk.

That's basically the conversation I had with the first act. But when I gave

Comments

pretty smart

[anonymous]

your story has a lot of depth. I like how you put effort into your work, with research and intellectual wording. I've never been to the desert before but these army recruiters came to my school once and talked about it...i felt bad for them...and yet proud. About cherry blossoms, i almost bought cherry blossom perfume once...it smelled like old lady (ewww!) your writing is really inspirational, so keep writing! i can't wait to read the next chapter!