Awesome! Really great outsider POV and you really managed to actually build character into the barman, too- made him very real and sympathetic :highfive: You staying dry?
Thank you, bebe. I put myself in the barman's place and wrote from there. What does that say about me, huh? *g*
Just staying dry. We had flash flooding on Wed afternoon. The new drainage and trench was overflowing, the water was heading indoors. It's washed away half our drive way. Towns north and south were under water. Today is sunny but it's clouding over and we're in for more rain. *sob*
We've had years like that. 10 years of drought. The weather cycle has really turned. Apparently, it's normal, only we had forgotten the cycle.
The govt built a couple of desalination plants - to get fresh water out of the ocean - and they're rotting, just sitting there, billions of tax payer dollars wasted.
The environmentalists told the govt "no need to build more dams, it will never rain again in substantial quantities." Yeah, right.
I liked the details you added to the character, but that we could still tell what scene was being described even though we had only seen it from Angel's perspective.
Ah...very nicely done, Ares. I just love this scene. Bartenders see it all and it stands to reason he's become very good at psyching out the customers.
Plus I got that image in my head of Angel's coat flowing and, well, that makes my day. :)
Excellent! I like that there are details we get about the bartender, making him a sympathetic observer rather than just an observer. He's the perfect person to notice all this and I love that while he doesn't know the full story, he gets some things.
I also love all the bits of humor. Peacocks and his constant distraction from his observations about Angel. Great job!
I'm glad the barman came across as a real person. And a bit of a scatterbrain. :) A man in his position would have to try and keep track of many conversations he hears in a night. I would think he would get a bit distracted.
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Just staying dry. We had flash flooding on Wed afternoon. The new drainage and trench was overflowing, the water was heading indoors. It's washed away half our drive way. Towns north and south were under water. Today is sunny but it's clouding over and we're in for more rain. *sob*
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Lovely work by the way. No one sees the bartender, but the bartender sees everyone. Good work!
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:~))
We've had years like that. 10 years of drought. The weather cycle has really turned. Apparently, it's normal, only we had forgotten the cycle.
The govt built a couple of desalination plants - to get fresh water out of the ocean - and they're rotting, just sitting there, billions of tax payer dollars wasted.
The environmentalists told the govt "no need to build more dams, it will never rain again in substantial quantities." Yeah, right.
I hear a rain dance helps?
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Ares
Edited for spelling mistakes. :)
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Plus I got that image in my head of Angel's coat flowing and, well, that makes my day. :)
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And Doyle noticed too. *g*
I'm happy the barman came across as a real character.
Thank you for your thoughts.
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I also love all the bits of humor. Peacocks and his constant distraction from his observations about Angel. Great job!
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Thank you for your lovely feedback.
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Loved it!
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There was a hint of Buffy there, with the blonde reference too. :)
And I do love looking at Angel through another person's eyes. I know how much my eyes like looking at him. :)
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