Art and Writing update
Another small art update, and also some writing omg D: Not much on the personal front, not without this being a hugeass long entry that I cbf'ed writing right now hehe.
( Art and writing! this way! )
( Art and writing! this way! )
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Actually a bit before you posted this I was pondering making that bit longer, just got to work out which bits to add and fiddle with atmo haha
I'm not 100% sure yet, I have wanted to do a longer story for Yena and her other half, but was never sure how to do it, but this could possibly be a good start.
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the main improvement i could think of is dont say "drugs" so much - hardly anyone who takes recreational drugs actually calls them "drugs" - try some euphamisms, there are certain people i could think of that would be only too happy to help you in that regard >.>
the general tone of the story seems pretty structured, which is the exact opposite of what your character is probably feeling. make it more rambly and it would prolly fit the mood better :3
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Honestly main reason I kept to just "drugs" atmo is because I cant make up my mind on what she is on, I'm thinking some sort of horrible horrible acid, but nfi what to call it xD But at this point in the story she is an addict n will snort/smoke/ingest/inject anything she can get.
Hmm, yerr Might work on rambleness, it was meant to be a recount at first, buuut after like the first line it changed haha.
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