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[antimiya88]

Hello minna!!! ^_^ I'm Andy, better known as antimiya88on lj! I'm an active arashi fanfic writer since October 2014 - it's been almost 2 years (!) - and since then I've posted quite a few stories of mine! I mostly write Sakuraiba and Ohmiya since they are my two OTPs but I have given a shot with other pairings as well! I would like to listen to your honest opinions concerning my fics. From plot ideas, character and story development to grammar and language use (as I'm not a native English speaker). I want to improve the best I can so here I am!
You can find my masterpost here:
http://antimiya88.livejournal.com/12282.html
Yoroshiku Onegaishimasu~

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I've read your "I'm not your boss, honey". I have to say, the general emotional atmosphere of sexual tension and rivals turning into lovers is great, however it is rather obvious that English is not your first language, and your stories suffer from that.

I don't know if you have a beta; I'd say that your grammar is generally not that bad (I've seen way worse), but there are occasional errors. Like here, in terms of tense agreement:

They had already reached their destination and got out of the taxi. Masaki was already advancing towards the building’s entrance when Sho’s hand forbid him from making another step.

It should be: They had already reached their destination and GOTTEN out of the taxi. Masaki was already advancing towards the building's entrance when Sho's hand FORBADE him from making another step.

Keep the past perfect tense in the first sentence (since you already used it for "they had reached their destination" and keep the past tense for the "forbid" part.

And here as well:
“I had enough of your flirt Aiba-san!

[antimiya88]

Someone actually replied! ^^
First of all, thank you for taking the time to write such a long and detailed comment! I really appreciate it!
Now to your points... Obviously I'm not a native speaker. I'm Greek! The truth is that I don't have a beta-reader. I used to be one myself and I know that the time required for beta-ing is much. The main problem is that my time for writing is already limited - I'm finishing my PhD thesis atm - so I believe I won't be able to post anything in case of having to wait the beta-reader as well - especially when my chapters are 5 - 6.000 words each! ><" I know there are some mistakes here and there. I re-read my stories two and even three times before posting them but the eye can't always catch everything. I've recognized stupid mistakes myself - after I have posted a fic - but then again I get lazy and leave the post as it is

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