There will be more.

[artai]

Calico jumped from the rigging, landing with a wet thud as his hooves hit the deck. He had been stuck in the crow's nest since sundown with salt crusting the fur on his legs and his eye in a spyglass. His red one to be precise, it was part of his birthmark from his father, not through genes but through actions. He was the product of a demon's

Comments

[artai]

Seriously, I'd fix the format but I just pasted it from where it was originally written.

[the_sundog]

The format is fine. It's entirely readable. I'm very glad you wrote about Calico. I knew that was what you wanted. It's a damned fine scene, and it sits well as a short story. Writing more would be great, I just hope you won't mind if what you write about doesn't happen in future tabletop campaigns.

There are a few punctuation omissions. They only make me wince a little, and I am picky. The last two sentences of the first paragraph could use a little going over. The last one could be clarified a little. He had to flee a ship but was fine on the docks? Lastly, how did his grin save Toregg?

Like I said, damned fine scene. *Love!*