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artemisrae

FMA: 52 Flavours, Prompt 25

Nov 08, 2007 20:27

Title: A Good Idea at the Time
Series: Fullmetal Alchemist
Theme no.: 25. less remain in one place
Pairing: Ed/Winry, Al
Rating: K+
Summary: It’s not uncommon for the groom to get cold feet.
Notes: First of three updates for
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fma, edxwinry, 52flavours

Comments 28

mulzrule November 9 2007, 01:51:12 UTC

Bwahahaha1 That last line was priceless! I liked Al's persuasive weapons, Ed's guilt, fear and pride. Izumi WOULD find him.

artemisrae November 10 2007, 00:37:06 UTC

Ed would not stand a chance versus Izumi. Thank god Al knows his brother so well.

littlemoonhime November 9 2007, 02:41:03 UTC

“You and Ed deserve each other, you know that?” You tell 'em Al!! ROFL!! Good stuff. Really enjoyed this. ^_^

artemisrae November 10 2007, 00:38:14 UTC

Thank you! Thank god Ed and Winry have Al, honestly. He knows the better than they know themselves.

ear145 November 9 2007, 05:41:38 UTC

yay! more ficlets!

I really look forward to reading anything by you, because its always so wonderfully written, and this has been no exception.

(and Al is right. They do deserve each other ^^)

artemisrae November 10 2007, 00:39:45 UTC

*blush* Awww thanks - I'm glad you're enjoying the fics. (Only 17 to go! Eee!)

lyricnonsense November 9 2007, 06:42:38 UTC

Hahahahahahahahahahha. The idea of Ed and Winry bumping into each other as they ran away from each other is priceless.

And so is the idea of Winry trying to bolt as well. I love the fact that it was the threat of Roy's eternal teasing that gets Ed to calm down.

Top notch, as always, although I am having a little trouble with this line:
and several of the Rockbell’s larger, burlier customers

I am fairly certain it's grammatically correct, but the fact that I stopped and had to think about it kind of broke me out of the story.

artemisrae November 10 2007, 00:44:25 UTC

Damn, that might have actually been a better idea than having Al and Riza save them... (of course, Mustang's teasing WOULD have been merciless. Ed's lucky I didn't do that to him.)

I am fairly certain it's grammatically correct, but the fact that I stopped and had to think about it kind of broke me out of the story.

Ahh, that's what I get for rushing juxtaposie through the beta job last night - she usually points out the awkward sentences. I might try to revise that later.

terracottabones November 9 2007, 07:25:28 UTC

Cuuuute! If the Internet could transmit squeals....it would be doing that now. Tee hee. What a delightful iea.

Looking at Lyra's comment, I wonder if you might change "Rockbell's" to "Rockbells'". Nice work besides!

artemisrae November 10 2007, 00:49:22 UTC

Awwww, I'm so glad you liked it! The fluff will not be ending any time soon, so I'm happy everyone approves.

Looking at Lyra's comment, I wonder if you might change "Rockbell's" to "Rockbells'".

I believe that takes it out of the possessive though? Damn, I'm a journalism major, I should know this stuff. WOW I TOTALLY MISSED WHERE YOU MOVED THE APOSTROPHE <-- is dumb.