Oneshot: I'm in the belly of the whale.

[asmallsmackerel]

Title: I'm in the belly of the whale.
Pairing: David Archuleta/David Cook
Summary: Neal may not talk much, but he does think. Too much sometimes.
Rating: PG-13 for Neal's language.
Word Count: 2, 760
Chapter: 1/1
Disclaimer: All of this is fictional and made for fun. I make no profit off of this or claim any rights. I don't own either David.
Inspired

Comments

[rhiminee_1]

Wow, I really liked this! I totally wasn't sure at first because things weren't sounding in the favor of Archie (who I love beyond all healthy accounting!) but by the end I was really feeling the vibe. And what kind of psycho am I that I can't stand to read fic where Archie is not the best of people? Don't know, but that's me. :p

[asmallsmackerel]

You just made my heart go a flutter. No lie. :) Gosh, wow, you just, wow, I am so touched by all that you had to say about me, I really am. <3 And yeah, I know that making Archie appear as somewhat the bad guy wasn't for me either, but I had to bear through it and remedy it in the end of course. :D

[mellowdee]

This was SO DIFFERENT, but I really really liked it!!

He shakes his head meekly before looking back down at Dave. “He, um, he was having trouble sleeping , that’s why we came in here, and now that he’s finally asleep, I don’t want to risk it, you know?”

SO. ADORABLE. Loved this!

But you swear to the Jack Daniel Gods above that you still wouldn’t hesitate to kick his small ass if it came to that. It’s just that now, that seems less likely.

You went to a bar, played beer pong, and actually talked to Dave’s kid without being tempted to throw a punch.

It was a good day.

I SORT OF FEELS LIKE THIS SUMS OF NEAL VERY WELL. I have this feeling that he's a pretty simple guy underneath all the exterior.

Very very well written POV of someone else on Cookleta! Really liked this! :D

[asmallsmackerel]

:DDDDD

I'm thrilled that the different worked for you. <3

And I'm really, really glad that you thought that Neal would be that way. I think, too, that behind that enigma there's a guy that loves music, beer, his friends, and his dog. And haha, I'm not sure of what else. But you get the point, I hope. :P

I'm stoked that you thought so, bb! Makes me smile knowing that you approve.

[rajkumari905]

This was awesome. Loved Neal's POV. <333 And that scene at the end was SO SWEET OMGOSH.

[asmallsmackerel]

I'm happy that Neal worked for you. :) He was a bit of a stinker to work with. Haha. Thank you for reading! And I'm happy that you liked it! :D

[james_padfoot]

Oh boys. The thing is though, I see Cook being very hesitant to come out if he had to. I mean, this is just me tinhatting of course, but I think the pressure wouldn't be on just lil D, though his would be twicefold.

I loved Neal's train of thought, and the flow, and the angst for a friend, and this was really, really well written. <3

[asmallsmackerel]

If I were to guess how Cook would feel about coming out in real life, I'm kind of split down the middle. On one hand, that's a lot of added media attention that isn't exactly positive but on the other, before I wrote this I was reminded of all sorts of support that Cook has shown for homosexuals and just being yourself, so that's what I based this on. :) Yeah, didn't mean to ramble on you, just wanted to put that out there.

But I'm glad that you enjoyed my Neal, because I was super worried about how he was going to turn out after he was done cooking. Thank you for reading and I'm glad that you liked this piece. Really glad. :D

[jehane_writes]

Hon, I must say I was a little hesitant about this when I got that this entire thing would be Neal POV, but it did actually really work for me.

I know you're stretching yourself, and I see you really developing as a writer, and it's lovely to watch ;) And makes me braver, since, I am still too chickenshit to write Neal POV, although I do have a desire to make some Cookmann.

You talk too little and think too much. You get that.

You went to a bar, played beer pong, and actually talked to Dave’s kid without being tempted to throw a punch.

THIS.

[asmallsmackerel]

I can see why you would be, because he is a tough character, in my opinion, to decipher and I was so unsure if I was even anywhere close. But I'm thrilled that it worked for you. :)

Awwww, gosh. :D Well, I'm sure that if you went for it, you would do marvelous as always. <3333 In fact, I encourage you to do so.

-brings out pom poms-

Happy that you enjoyed it!