A Wager between Teachers Part B

[astra_sequi]

Title: A Wager between Teachers
Fandom: Star Trek XI
Pairing: Kirk/Spock
Rating: R, NC-17
Word Count: 7437
Note 1: Response to kink meme prompt found here
Note 2: Hopefully this actually makes sense. It made sense in my mind...which ultimately means nothing to anybody else in the end. Please enjoy my poor attempts at sexy scenes and kind of

Comments

[insanekht]

This was awesome and adorable. I love how Spock won't put up with any of Kirk's bullshit. XD

[clebarde]

“Please cease your swinging and commence doing something with my hands."

Giggle-snort, this was perfect!

[hsavinien]

Okay, generally good, but these two sentences are a bit of a problem for me.

Throwing caution to the wind, Jim braced himself with one hand and used the other to slide between Spock’s ass. Soap and water made Spock’s skin slick and easy to slide into to.

"Between Spock's ass" is missing a word (ass cheeks?) or...something. In any case, not technically sound. Sentence two...er. Soap and water is really nooot that great a lubricant. Soap is burny (think soap in eyes) and wet skin tends to chafe, despite the many, many ficcers who seem to think otherwise. ^_^" May want to adjust that a bit.

Last two sentences are awesome as well as Kirk trying to steal McCoy's actual trousers while he was wearing them.

[astra_sequi]

Hm, interesting about the chaffing and soap and good to know as I'm completely oblivious to anything related to sex. This whole story was more or less a lesson in embarassing writing. :P

Anyways, thanks for the advice and glad you enjoyed it. :D

[hsavinien]

No problem, I've never done the smutty things I write about either. ^_^ Just do some research (beyond fanfic, unless there are people you know did their research). Just bear in mind that up the arse is mucus membranes. Good rule of thumb is that if it would be a bad idea to get it in your eye or up your nose then it's probably going to be painful there too.

[astra_sequi]

Thanks for the insight. On a semi-related note, I never thought I would ever be having this conversation in life. :D