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Mar 07, 2006 18:00

Title: Discard
Author: buckle_berry
Fandom/pairing: LotRPS; Elijah Wood/Dominic Monaghan
Rating: PG-13 for angst
Disclaimer: I made this up.
A/N: Many thanks to pettydetails for a whipcrackin' beta.

I don't need, I don't need to hear you say
If we weren't so alike
You'd like me a whole lot more

( Momentarily his fingers hovered over the keypad, but in the end the only button he hit was 'discard.' )

Comments 21

verangel March 19 2006, 17:44:18 UTC

so sad...excellent. I read through and was confused then realized the message was on the top. I look forward to more of it although it is very very sad when someone is hurting so badly, still.

buckle_berry March 19 2006, 18:55:52 UTC

I was struggling a bit to find a balance between being too obscure and being too obvious. Hopefully it made sense in the end! Thanks for your comment.

verangel March 20 2006, 01:04:22 UTC

you were perfect. :)

kissing_athelas March 19 2006, 22:07:39 UTC

Beautifully written. I especially liked this paragraph:

Elijah waited in line to pay, scrabbling in his pockets for the bills he remembered shoving there earlier. A movement ahead of him caught his eye, and he startled. The guy next in line was a few inches taller than Elijah, with too-blond highlights in his bedhead hair and a grey hood hanging down the back of his sweatshirt. Elijah felt his heart stop beating for the few harried seconds it took his brain to remember that there was no one to recognize here in New York, not now, not any more. He exhaled, flow of blood returning to his veins with a sweep of nausea. He'd pay with plastic.

because it rang so true for me personally - the way it feels to have that little moment of panic/excitement over someone.

Loved the mirroring of lives too. Very effective in an understated way. :)

buckle_berry March 19 2006, 23:39:40 UTC

Yeah, I know that feeling too - the way your brain takes a split second to catch up. Horrible.

I'm so pleased you liked it. Thanks :)

emotecontrol March 20 2006, 00:09:56 UTC

I dislike angst.

...I loved this! You have a gift for a gentle, yet somber form of angst that felt very close, as if I was really there. Thank you for this.
Excellent.

buckle_berry March 20 2006, 09:57:35 UTC

An angst convert! That's what I like to hear. I'm glad you read it in spite of the warning, and thank you for your lovely compliments.

mother2012 March 21 2006, 05:01:13 UTC

Yeah.

buckle_berry March 21 2006, 15:04:32 UTC

*sigh*

unperfectwolf March 22 2006, 07:39:25 UTC

This does something to me. I don't know what, and I'm sure I could tell you if I wasn't home alone at neary midnight with alcohol, but as it is I know it does something and I really liked this.

buckle_berry March 22 2006, 21:27:41 UTC

Something is better than nothing, I think. Just so long as it didn't make you feel too angst ridden.