Teaser Tuesday

[attle_marie]

Which I finally caught and remembered about.

Considering I just started my rewrite last night, I don't think I have anything of real worth to post. So have a little something from the old draft!

It's unedited and crappy, so be forewarned.

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He was still sitting at the kitchen table, Kavi having left, to sit on the roof most likely, and he was

Comments

[excommunimoi]

Sachi, moya lyubov! This is Dreamy, and I have at last discovered your livejournal. Joy of joys. :)

I can't tell you how much I love this. The telling is good, the pacing is excellent, and the dialogue is just so natural and seamless. I like their interactions, too, the clumsy flirtation and minuscule gestures that make up a conversation. This is the part where I hit you with something blunt until you send me a full copy. Like, now.

... *hits with blunt object*

[attle_marie]

*Squawks* You can read the second draft. :P The first one is moot. and Ugly.