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audreybuttercup

LJ Idol Exhibit A-Throw Back The Little Ones

Jan 29, 2013 15:42

*There's a nail in the door
And there's glass on the lawn
Tacks on the floor
And the TV is on
And I always sleep with my guns when you're goneThe light was too quick for her. She always forgot about that damned tin pie plate hanging in the garden, the 6 pm sunbeam hit her in the eyes every time. She made another mental note to move the thing. ( Read more... )

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myrna_bird January 30 2013, 22:00:15 UTC

Wow. Really creepy scary. The song lyrics added a lot too.

audreybuttercup January 30 2013, 22:57:38 UTC

Thank you! I was worried about the lyrics. I'm finding they're not to everybody's taste.

lilycobalt January 31 2013, 04:33:53 UTC

Oh, I could figure out that the husband was dead, but not why. I thought this was going to be a mundane story and that the shotguns...were not going to be necessary. So I enjoyed the official turn into horror once the sun set.

Also, that is such a cool song. I need to actually listen to it now. :D

audreybuttercup February 1 2013, 03:19:55 UTC

:grin: Thank you!

The first time I heard the song was when I watched Kill Bill 2 some years back and this story has been brewing ever since. It's a really great song. Let me know what you think after you listen to it.

ohelectricshock January 31 2013, 06:58:06 UTC

I really loved the use of the lyrics here, it helped to create such an eerie atmosphere that permeated the whole story. Very creepy! I liked it.

audreybuttercup February 1 2013, 03:20:39 UTC

Thank you! I was worried about the lyrics but I love that flow that poetry or music can bring to a story. :)

halfshellvenus January 31 2013, 07:14:21 UTC

Ooh, what an interesting setting!

One of the saddest undertones to this kind of genre is that you can understand the temptation to give up, to stop fighting and fighting and finally join the monsters that surround you, just to have it at last be over.

audreybuttercup February 1 2013, 03:22:14 UTC

Exactly! The funny thing is that this theme comes out in my fiction much more than my personal non fiction yet I deal with it on a fairly regular basis. Experiences with death, grief, pain...sometimes you just want them done no matter the cost.

phoenixejc January 31 2013, 13:32:54 UTC

Whoa! How deliciously dark! Love it!

audreybuttercup February 1 2013, 03:22:27 UTC

:big grin: Thank you! :D