Ok first off, you write a hella awesome sword fight scene for not having much experience with sword fighting. Also, your style of writing is so good homg :O
The sun beat down relentlessly, heating and baking the earth like clay in a kiln. Soon, blood, organs, and tissues would cover the plain as if paint and glaze.
Oh man that is so gory and awesome. And the way you wrote this whole thing in general feels so realistic. I can think of only one other story where I got this absorbed into it on LJ. It read almost like a movie, I could see what was going on in my head. Oh geez you have me fangirling so much right now~~ KEEP WRITING.
Really? I wasn't too happy with the sword fight, mostly because sword fights look awesome in movies, but I've always found them hard to follow in writing. Kind of like car chases -- they're put in for visual impact, but not really the quality of the movie/book/whatever.
THOSE SIMILES. I thought they were waaaay too over-the-top, but I'm glad you like them. XD
Heheh, I like my gore. I tend to get wordy and too descriptive sometimes, I think, but if you think it flows... that gives me hope. AND I WILL KEEP WRITING, don't you worry. :D
Hmm I personally think while that can be the case, there can be plenty of instances when the writing of a sword fight can seem almost if not just as a real as a sword fight scene from a movie. It just depends on the author.
NO SUCH THING. >:<
Oh I can really like gore too as long as it's not too over the top. And sometimes I suppose you can get a little wordy, but it's nothing I really notice if you do xD.
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The sun beat down relentlessly, heating and baking the earth like clay in a kiln. Soon, blood, organs, and tissues would cover the plain as if paint and glaze.
Oh man that is so gory and awesome. And the way you wrote this whole thing in general feels so realistic. I can think of only one other story where I got this absorbed into it on LJ. It read almost like a movie, I could see what was going on in my head. Oh geez you have me fangirling so much right now~~ KEEP WRITING.
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THOSE SIMILES. I thought they were waaaay too over-the-top, but I'm glad you like them. XD
Heheh, I like my gore. I tend to get wordy and too descriptive sometimes, I think, but if you think it flows... that gives me hope. AND I WILL KEEP WRITING, don't you worry. :D
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NO SUCH THING. >:<
Oh I can really like gore too as long as it's not too over the top. And sometimes I suppose you can get a little wordy, but it's nothing I really notice if you do xD.
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